Yetsuna power mechanics update

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Character Name: Yetsuna Yishnir

Current/New Real Age: Unchanged 

Current/New Age of Appearance: Unchanged

New Ideals/Personality: None

New Appearance: N/a

New History: N/a

New Powers: Power modifications and simplifications

Note added for powers section: The term "stone" and "sand" are used interchangeably in her powers, both refer to any type of earth that Yetsuna generates as a result of her powers

Grammer fix: While it doesn't have a inherent flaw or weakness she does not get to use this power freely, for every cubic foot of stone she produces she uses 10 reaitsu, meaning if she's not careful she can easily overexert herself.

Shikai Overall: Sand Strip: Rather than relying on hard numbers and impossible to track numbers this passive has been reworked to be simplified. This replaces Paragraphs 2-5 under Shikai Overall.

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Any stone she creates as the unique ability to strip whatever it comes in contact with of any element found within the confines of the earth such as carbon, metals, silicone, etc. Any object that comes in contact of the stone/sand well have roughly a half inch taken out of it per pass. Smaller objects such as weapons will begin to suffer structural damage, thus giving it a higher chance of breaking. (its difficult to try and take into consideration every kind of object or size so the skill is subject to some on the spot rulings)

When it comes to surfaces like walls and the ground the ability can cover a nearly indefinite area as long as the sand is a minimum of 4 inches thick. For every square foot of material stripped from a surface Yetsuna gets to summon one square foot of stone/sand with no cost. (I structured the skill like this because it will be easier to track than constantly adding onto whatever she is already manipulating.)

Every pass against someones release weapon will cause anywhere from a few centimeters to a few millimeters of damage depending on the size/thickness of the weapon. With each pass the chances of the weapon breaking or suffering damage from a blow increases, however the damage is repairable. The wielder of the weapon can repair any damage done to their weapon for a cost of 50 Reiatsu per pass her sand has done on the weapon.

Using a sword as a baseline a single pass will take off approximately a centimeter off the side or the tip. If the person she's fighting has a spiritual stat equal to or lower and her own. If the persons spiritual stat is higher than her own the amount taken off is halved. If they their stat is 50% higher than her own their weapon(s) are immune to the damage. This effect can only occur once per weapon per post.

If Yetsuna has summoned at least 10 cubic feet in the last 2 rounds she can summon an additional 3 cubic feet of stone for free. For every 5 cubic feet of stone beyond 10 she can summon an additional 2 cubic feet for free, i.e. if she has summoned 20 cubic feet of stone after 2 posting rounds she can summon 5 cubic feet of stone for free. This stone does not need to be used immediately and can actually build up over time, with the maximum amount she can have on reserve being 25 cubic feet. The free stone she summons does count towards the cubic footage needed to summon more free stone.

In order for this ability to work the stone must be in close proximity to something that can be stripped of raw materials, i.e. this ability will not function in mid-air.

Manufactured (non-organic) weapons are subject to being stripped of raw materials as well. For the sake of simplicity this damage is represented in a percentage. Every time she strikes a their weapon in a offensive manner with her stone the chance of it breaking increases by 5%, maxing out at 50%. This damage is not permanent and can be fixed on the spot if the wielder desires, all they must do is expend 50 reaitsu per percentage point of damage. The damage can be fixed at any point the user desire, but there is a catch for not repairing the damage quickly. If the chance of the weapon breaking reaches a total of 25% or more they must pay 75 reaitsu per point of damage over 25%, i.e. if they the weapon had a 35% chance of breaking they have to pay 75 x 10 to reduce it to 25% then 50 x 25. If the total reaches over 40% it increases to 100 reaitsu per point over 40%, i.e. if they user had the full 50% it would be 100 x 10, 75 x 15, and finally 50 x 25.

If the person she's fighting has a spiritual stat equal to or lower and her own. If the persons spiritual stat is higher than her own the amount taken off is halved. If they their stat is 50% higher than her own their weapon(s) are immune to the damage. This effect can only occur twice per weapon per post.

Clarification for Armor: Another important part of her Shikai is the armor itself, it's for more than just a cool look. The armor gives Yetsuna a defense bonus, protecting her from blows from opponents, if they can't match her strongest spiritual stat they are unlikely to crack through her armor in a single blow and she receives heavily reduced damage, if as though the attacker had 65% (35% reduction) of their offensive stat (the armor acts like a class 4 technique in clashes of techniques). If the attackers offensive stat surpasses her spiritual pressure the damage is still reduced, but only by 10%.

Power added to golem: The golem posses the ability to shunpo, but any shunpo it executes counts against Yetsuna's total shunpo for the post and also subtracts from her reaitsu pool.

Unyielding Stone Regeneration costs:
Hand: 75 Reaitsu
Arm: 125
50% of body: 250
75%: 375
Full: 500

Stored up stone for Yetsuna's sand strip passive ability can be used instead of reaitsu to regenerate the golem. Using the stone Yetsuna has stored up she can restore up to 25% of the golems total body mass. Any stored stone used in this manner is expended in 5 cubic foot increments (5, 10, 15, 20, 25). If the total damage to the golems body is greater she can expend stored stone and reaitsu to restore the golem to full "health".

Stats added to golem:  Senses and Instinct scale off of Yetsuna's.

Correction to Bankai Overall: Additionally, the golem has durability equal to Yetsuna's Reiatsu Strength (Spiritual Pressure) plus an additional 25%.

Modification to Falling to Pieces: The splitting process is still the same, but the way its strength is dispersed is changed. All other stats remain unchanged.

2 20' golems have 500 strength each

4 10' have 250 strength

Modification/Clarification to Bankai Overall: Defensive ability is increased from 25% to 35% while the break damage goes from 15% to 10%.


What kind of update: Mechanical/upgrade

Current Rank: 

New Rank:

[Amagai Kuchiki]

This formatting is, while effective for things such as video games, unhelpful when I can't reference the existing text. The standard procedure here is to post your powers, and highlight the changes you want to make in red. That way, we can examine it in context.

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Il go through and make the edits I'll let you know when they're up

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Context was added, I think I got everything, but lemme know if something doesn't make sense.

[Amagai Kuchiki]

For the record, these feel less like tweaks and more like straight buffs in a lot of places. I'm gonna go ahead and 1/2 this, to get it rolling, but it'll be up to another mod to determine whether these are appropriate changes or not.

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

I wanna say it is and isn't a buff at the same time. My main goal was to try and make most of the numbers her powers had more reasonable/easier to comprehend (i.e. her sand strip ability and the mass of earth for the golem to regen). A few things are buff, namely her armors damage reduction. Most of the stuff that was added to golem was done with/at the request of Z. This happens a lot when I work on stuff, I have a bad habit to just keep building, even if it takes away from my original intent. If there's something you don't like lemme know and we can work something out.

[Zeich Yajuu]

Alright, so let's go over this. I will note now at the start of this that, due to experience with our "discussions" in the past, if this goes beyond simple discussion and turns into arguing, I will deny this. We had a lot of issue with Cortana's powers in the past because of this reason, and I do not want this to turn into another argument like last time. Clarification, polite debate, and polite correction are all fair game, and I encourage the ability to discuss this in your favor.

That being said, let's move on with the grading.

Shikai overall - Updating from square feet to cubic feet is fine.

Sand strip changes - We've gone from small wearing away of weapons and metallic objects to suddenly completely lowering durability? This is a direct buff, especially with the cost. 50 per 1% doesn't sound like much, but that's 250 Reiatsu someone would have to pay every time they touched your stone. Stone armor? It's stone! Stone barrier? Stone! Stone golem? Stone! You see where this becomes a problem? This goes from being a "convert spiritual energy and earth-like objects into stone" to "drain out all the opponent's Reiatsu with every ability I have or make them risk losing their weapon." Additionally, you had it include organic and artificial objects, where before it only worked on minerals and other similar objects that were made of materials you could make earth from. And then there's the costs; let's say someone got to 30%. That's 1750 Reiatsu they'd have to pay for hitting you a total of six times. Six, when you're a tanky setup and your entire defense covering your body is stone. This is a direct and notable buff and without significant CIU to explain such an increase in strength, I can't pass it.

Armor - we went from 15% stat reduction when compared against the armor the armor and 25% overall less damage done to Yetsuna if the armor is broken through to a pure 35% stat reduction in offense? This seems like a very direct buff. The first was "slightly harder to break than normal, and a slight reduction of physical harm" to "much harder to break than normal." This is like giving yourself Hierro AND a 35% stat boost, so no. This is a buff, and again will not be passed in this form.

The additional effects for thoroughness don't need to be added, that's just general common sense issues. Though for abrasion/damage, it should at least be stated that damage is blocked by defensive techniques.

Golem I suggested you give it stats, but I don't recall telling you to give it 400 Instinct. You do realize that it makes for insane reaction time, especially when it can Shunpo, correct? I'd accept Senses/instinct equal to Yetsuna's. Golem clarification to stat is fine.

Unyielding Stone - Keep it at 90 cubic, given how much stone you can create and how much there usually is around, especially since it's not listed how much cost is required for different amounts of damage. In fact, include a cost table, something like "repairing a limb is 100 Reiatsu" etc.

Golem distribution - You realize that you're actually gaining total strength as you break them up, right...? You went from 1000 (1), 1000 (500 x 2), 1200 (300 x 4), 2000 (250 x 8), and then 6000 (150 x 40). No. If they're going to split, it's going to have to be evenly. Yes, that reduces the use of summoning 40 golems, but why are you summoning 40 anyway?

The Bankai changes are a direct buff, so no.

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Sand Strip: This ability actually isn't as much of a buff as it seems. If I'm reading what you said correctly you're mainly concerned about the damage to release weapons. That ability was actually in the original, but the damage was in a measurement not a percentage (reference the third paragraph under the first spoiler section). The numbers I used are a bit high, which was on purpose, but I also fully expected them to get nerfed and am willing to do so. As for the "every time they contact her stone" I'm more than happy to had some nuances so that it doesn't seem as ridiculous, but I would also like to point out her armor isn't made of stone, it actually metal and therefore not subject to this ability, and no she can't coat herself in her stone to make it work either.

Shikai armor: I'm sorry for the confusion here, it's not just a flat 35% reduction, I just copied the paragraph with the change. It's 35% if you can't break her armor and 15% if you can. Though an idea I just had could add a middle ground saying that if you can meet anywhere between 50-75% of her sppr you partially break the armor and do like 20-25% reduced damage. There is no stat boost to speak of in this part of her abilities so I'm a little unclear where you're get a 35% increase.

Bankai armor: The 25% stat boost for defensive purposes is actually a reduction off its current amount of 50%. The stat "boost" doesn't affect her actual combat ability, just her defense, I added the cutback bit to see if I could slide that by, I can take that out if requested. The defensive numbers here were increased to compensate for the shikai's increased defense.

Golem stat: 400 was a shot from the hip, I'm willing to nerf this, if you're okay scaling those stats off of Yetsuna I'm down to do it.

Unyielding Stone: I'll add a chart for regenerating the golem. 

Falling to Pieces: I took a shot at the numbers to try and keep the golem viable as it splits. If I do a even distribution like you request it's strength would diminish at a dramatic pace, if I even distributed 1000 among 8 I'm left with 150 a piece, which (I think) is laughable. It gets even worse at 40 which leaves 25 a piece so they wouldn't even be able to move. As for why I would summon 40, I can't think of a reason off the top of my head, but the option is there if I need it.

Cortana was also a LOT of work hours, this isn't so I don't really have too much a reason to argue with ya here XD

[Zeich Yajuu]

My apologies, I guess I misremembered your armor being made of stone. Let me correct this then. If I may make a suggestion, make it "every time the weapon is struck by her stone." This means that defensive uses won't wear down an enemy's weapon, but if they block or are outright struck, it will. You also didn't address my point on organic compounds and the like.

For the Shikai number, my math is a little off, but you basically directly cut the stat of the attack hitting you by 35%. Even if it's just as it pertains to that one attack, it's still the same thing as a stat cutter, albeit temporary. That's a major difference from the original, which treats attacks as though they were only 15% lower, and then reducing damage even if they went through. Again, this is a direct buff. The difference is that this can outright stop abilities and reduce their damage noticeably, while the other one had less of a chance to outright stop but still reduced damage even if you had to actually take damage. I will not pass this buff to the armor. This point has been addressed to a 35% reduction of damage if armor isn't broken (damage is still taken, just reduced), and 10% reduction of damage if armor is broken, since it absorbs some of the hit.

Also this is where we start hitting problems. "To see if I could slide that by." This is not a clarification, this is a buff. Cutback is a no.

Golem should scale off of your stats, yes.

Falling to pieces - You can say they become more laughable, but remember you also have multiple directions to attack from, and as it is, you're getting a complete additional entity with a power stat that's completely static and equal to a 2.5x buff, which is usually a Rank 2-3 buff from base. You should be quite fine with being able to only split into 2-4 copies, because you'd still get a lot of versatile directions to attack from.

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Updated

Table added for paid golem regeneration (added a second effect to it as well to make sand strip more valuable)

Before we put the nail in the coffin for the CIU I wanna go over the sand strip numbers a bit, I love what it does and how strong it is, but I feel like the numbers might be a bit too high. If you think its good as is I'll take it I just feel the numbers might seem unfair.

[Zeich Yajuu]

You didn't alter sand strip as we discussed in PC, it's still listing Release weapons in general.

I do not agree with the ability to use Sand Strip for regeneration, especially since it's very vague on how it works. The way it reads is that for every ten feet you generate, you gain 3 + 2/5 more feet generated out of nowhere, which doesn't really fit with the whole "sand strip." And then, because you can generate stone for next to no cost, you could theoretically end up spending far less to patch up your golem than the technique suggests, which is no good. I would say that it can reduce the cost of repairing your golem by an amount equal to 10 Reiatsu/cubic foot converted. Yes, it would require a lot for a full repair, but yours already costs 500 as it is, so you have either the fast or slow route.

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Sorry I took out the part specifically saying organic release weapons, I didnt really think to add something saying manufactured weapons only.

I elaborated on the Sand Strip for regeneration concept a bit more to better explain it, but the entire thing may change again if you agree I should overhaul her elemental generation abilities. As I mentioned in the PC I was thinking of something somewhat similar to Cortana, further simplifying her over powers and several abilities. Lemme know what you think, if you like the idea I'll put it to work tomorrow or the day after.

[Zeich Yajuu]

It still says Release-only. The way we discussed it was that it could work on any non-organic because it stripped away mineral materials, so while it's a buff, make sure you fix that.

While I know you have it listed that you have to strike a weapon to strip it in Sand Strip, do me a favor and include that it is only when you actually strike with the stone as opposed to just being struck. i.e. just make it known that someone else hitting your stone isn't bad, only if you hit them.

For the golem regeneration, I'd like it to only be a 25% cap simply because it's practically costless to use Sand Strip. With that, ofc, you can increase your max material storage to 25 feet, and spend increments of 5 feet to restore 5% of the golem's total mass, distributed as you like. Is that acceptable?

[Yetsuna Yishnir]

Edits done

[Zeich Yajuu]

You keep ignoring my first point. "Manufactured (non-organic) release weapons are subject to being stripped of raw materials as well." You can remove Release weapons and just make it all non-organic objects, as I said, unless you want it to be super-limited. XD

What is with the "rounded up" part in your regeneration ability? I mean, if you're spending increments of 5 cubic feet, that's static amounts. You can't really round a whole number like that unless you're rounding up to 10s or something. o.o