Post by Shizuka Sanamizu ✮ on Oct 2, 2024 15:53:53 GMT -5
Hey Alpha! I'll be your first grader!
Okay, in your Overall Personality in the second paragraph, you call Daniel "middle-aged-looking" but he appears to be 27 in his Appearance section. He is NOT middle-aged.
In his history, is it his sister... or his wife? Also, are these Dragons actually Hollows? Because we don't canonically have "Bleach dragons" on our site yet.
For Daniel's fighting style, don't forget to make sure you add points towards the Skills needed for him to be able to use Deathdealer's Dance and Predator's Bane (and any other fighting-type things) because that's the only way his knowledge will be justified.
Main Fullbring Description: I'm.... really unsure about using your blood as a "Release weapon" here. Yes, I know Chad's is his skin. But to use his blood as an armor that leaves his body entirely (so then how is he alive after that?) and to completely negate cutback's effects? We may need to brainstorm here. I also don't love that he just doesn't experience cutback the same as everyone else. There are already enough ways to handle it as it is, but this feels very much like a "oh this thing is inconvenient for me so I'm going to just negate it" type of deal. At the moment, I'm going to have to say no to the Fullbring being blood, as well. There are limitless types of other non-bodily fluids to choose from. Like actual gold, maybe? Also since this is just the description of what the stuff looks like, you can't include any mechanics here that aren't further explained under your Fullbring Property sections.
Main Fullbring Level 1 Property: So since we're not doing blood, all of this will need to be rewritten to conform to whatever other liquid (or substance, I suppose) that you choose. That being said, there are several general mechanics we can tweak. For example, for whatever X substance, the ability to control it should be your default Fullbring ability. From there, you can form your armor if you'd like or control it at will kind of like a water bender. Or.... gold bender. Or whatever bender. Also, don't worry about including the standard cost in here. All you should concern yourself with is if there are additional costs for specialty things. We already know simply activating your Fullbring has a cost.He can move it anywhere within his line of sight, or freely out in the open. He can't move it within places he can't see (like, for example, he can't let the fluid seep underground and make it do crazy stuff because he can't see underground. But he CAN let it float behind him even if he isn't looking behind himself).Daniel is capable of moving the blood anywhere he can sense directlyIf you give him healing expertise, he could do this kind of stuff just by being a Fullbringer. Also this is the kind of thing that should have an additional cost or some sort of drawback.Thanks to the blood being Rh-Null type any creature can safely receive it to restore their own blood supply. Since Daniel can control the motion and quality of the blood he can utilize it to enact healing upon a target if he so chooses, such as having the blood rapidly coagulate to seal a wound, or increasing the white blood cell concentration to help fight off infections.It's best to operate under post increments here, not actual time increments. Time is too fluid to balance powers.Daniel's Golden Blood retains his Reiatsu for a full 12 hours after separating from his body under usual circumstances. A creature that takes in Golden Blood will “digest” the Reiatsu in the blood in under 6 hours, but during that time they are vulnerable to Daniel's Manipulation.Choose either Strength of Reiatsu Strength but not both. Otherwise, I can't say I hate it. You give them a simple "out" but you have to realize that people won't know they have this "out" unless you tell them or become more well-known. Which is fine, but I'd say add a duration of effectiveness on here just in case. Maybe like 2 posts? That's pretty generous to be able to control someone's body. You also can't force them to kill themselves. We don't allow OHKOs here.By controlling the Golden Blood within a target Daniel can control them as if they were his Golden Blood as long as his Reiatsu Strength exceeds their Strength/Reiatsu Strength, but cannot activate any of their techniques or releases. A victim of this can flush the Reiatsu and free themselves in an instant by burning 200 Reiatsu.
Also, you do actually need to fill out your Level 2 Properties as well as your Secondary Fullbring. Just lemme know when you're done!
Finally, I totally understand wanting to pre-work your stats under the assumption that you'll get 280 starting SP, but your character, as a Training Tier, cannot have custom techniques. You also can't start with any techniques in general since you don't have any TTP when you first start out. And only Struggler types get Osens, which means you don't get one.
On that note, we also have a strict list of pre-approved Stats that you can use, and "Alien Aura" is not one of them. You must conform to the provided list of Stats that already exist. We do not have custom ones on this site.