Miranda Revamped

[Shizuka Sanamizu ✮]

Hey! I'll take care of the first round of grading since this is a revamp.



Everything up to the powers looks good since it's pretty general, so we'll start at fighting style!


Fighting Style: All good here. We typically just look for inconsistencies anyway.

Overall Ability:

Miranda can capture the reiatsu put off by others, but in a less efficient manner than the way she collects simple free-floating reishi. The conversion of foreign reiatsu/reishi to the reishi she can manipulate allows her to gain 25% of the cost of a spiritual tech to spend towards her next construct(s)

I'm a little hesitant on this right now because I'm not really sure the ability to passively steal Reiatsu is balanced every time someone uses a technique, but I'm not done reading yet. We'll see.

Shikai Overall abilities:

For her non-technique creations, their durability is equal to her spiritual OS and have a cost of 25 each.

Since you're basing the durability off of your highest Spiritual OS, I'm assuming you want that value to be pretty large. I don't necessarily have a problem with that, but for that low of a cost, I'd say 75% of the OS rather than the full value. Also, when you say non-technique creations, you mean just random constructs that she makes?

Bankai Overall Ability: Knowing how gigantic you plan on making this city (I know it's one building but that's huge), I don't think it should be allowed to break down structures. It can be formed over the course of a post, I think, if you want to keep it so large. But as for absorbing things, I think it can "break" them just like anything would break stuff apart but not absorb them. If I'm understanding correctly.

The realm of control should also really stay within the coliseum, but that's something that someone can find out In-Character, if you get what I'm saying. Once they're in, they're in.

Forcing into her realm will cause her reiatsu to weave with the high concentration of reishi within it to create a wall to repel unwanted penetrations.

The way this reads, it sounds like she can stand within the building and basically just say "No you can't come in" to anyone as a means of protection. This locks out combat and isn't allowed. You'll have to remove this part. What you can do, however, is cause a feeling of unease that doesn't leave the opponent unless they're outside of the structure. Just make them paranoid. Obviously they can resist with appropriate Skills and all, but it would mean you can mess with their heads.

Zanpakuto Techniques:

• Crystal wall: 400 Speed and we Gucci.
• Stalagmite Mine (Shikai): Keep the size and Speed, but let's do 10 in Bankai.
• Fragmentation (shikai): What does the note mean?
• Cold Shoulder ( Shikai): This is fine with me.
• Prelude To Pandemonium: Also fine, I think.
• Pandemonium Cometh: Either the cost needs to be upped to 500 or we match both Speeds at 800. I'm fine with either.

Everything else is really up to you when it comes to Stats and Skills, so let's start here!

[Miranda Frost]

Hello there and thank you for your insight here, it is very much appreciated. I've touched upon everything requested of me, the changes being highlighted in red.

Shikai overall: Correct. had trouble with the wording as I wanted some cinematic ability with the stuff like creating a hammer to help with maintenance or other tools and whatnot for non-combat use.

Bankai Overall ability: The reishi absorption was intended mainly for flavor regarding its creation (as this is exactly how she forms her other tools and whatnot, just on a bigger scale) Still, changing it isn't a big deal, having the buildings and obstacles in the way of the arena be destroyed instead of assimilated will produce the same end result, which isn't unwelcome either I suppose.

"The realm of control should also really stay within the coliseum, but that's something that someone can find out In-Character, if you get what I'm saying. Once they're in, they're in."

Also, I apologize. Not sure if i quite follow what you mean exactly. Could you elaborate a little? Are you referring to the way initially had the arena form? Just to be sure.

Fragmentation: It was a goof up on my part when I had the outline of what i wanted each tech to do. Its supposed to be the speed of the shard cloud.

[Shizuka Sanamizu ✮]

For the realm of control, what I'm saying is that they only find out they're stuck inside (unless they have higher Stats or whatever it is that allows them to escape if you wish) once they're actually inside the structure In-Character. So like, you may know what it does, and I may know what it does, but Shizuka has no clue and gets stuck once pulled in. Does that make sense?


Everything else looks good! Once we clear this up, I'll slap my sticker on it.

[Miranda Frost]

Fixed and hilighted in red.

[Shizuka Sanamizu ✮]

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

[Ludwig Verrlicht]

Heyo, I’ll be taking on your second round of grading for Miranda’s CIU. Just so it’s said prior if you have any questions on the grading hit me up on the discord if you want. I’m more than free to talk over things. That said let’s dig into this.

So seeing that Sana looked over this initially and gave the ok on everything else I’m just going to focus on your powers.


Overall ability:

“Any construct she makes, from the dullest crystal growths to elaborate blades, for example, will have a durability of 2 times her offensive spiritual stat”

So for her I’d like to see this changed to 1.5x in shikai and 2x in bankai. Given you’ve no inherent weapons aside from the gloves I’m more than ok with having extra durability. You’ll probably need it haha! However 2x in Shikai is a bit much personally so let’s tone it down a little in shikai. By Bankai though by all means have everything with 2x durability. Makes more than enough sense to me.




“Miranda can capture the reiatsu put off by others, but in a less efficient manner than the way she collects simple free-floating reishi. The conversion of foreign reiatsu/reishi to the reishi she can manipulate allows her to gain 25% of the cost of a spiritual tech to spend towards her next construct(s).. “

So considering that you’d like the ability to take another’s reiatsu and use it to fuel your creation ability we need to put a bit of a limit here. First thing I’d say is that it should be 25% of the reiatsu they used in a technique. Release or Non-release it’s just got to be spiritual based. The other thing is I’d say you need to have superior OS. Those with OS superiority shouldn’t be affected by this ability.

My reasoning behind this is that you’re taking reiatsu they use in an ability which is a static amount depending on the tech/ability. Thus the amount of reiatsu you get should be dependent more on how much they are using. This allows for potentially more things you can spawn out as well depending on the class of technique. At least as far as you’re base ability is concerned.

The one thing I do want to question though is does this work toward your release techs? Because from what I understand this is more towards your creations via your overall ability. If you do intend to have it fuel you’re release techniques then that’s fine by me actually but keep that as a bankai solely ability. The shikai version should be limited to just your creations made via the overall ability.




Shikai overall:

I’m alright with this. Only thing I’d like to see changed is the cost of your ability made walls, weapons, etc increased to 50 reiatsu. Aside from that I see nothing else to change.




Bankai Overall:

This is also good by me. Again only 1 thing I’d add in is that with Bankai active the weapons base durability should be equal to your OS now. This way you get the full effect of your 2x durability.




Zanpakuto Techniques:



Crystal Wall:

Make it 100 reiatsu and I’m good with it. Also you mention a limit of 1 in shikai. But given you can use this in bankai if you’d like I’m game for letting this have more walls spawned. Ya can keep the same cost for bankai even and probably slap a speed increase for it also. That’s up to you though, just an idea I thought I’d share with ya.



Stalagmite Mine:

Looks good to me.



Fragmentation:

I’m gonna say we need to drop the speed to 600. Otherwise I’m fine with this but 800 when you can detonate this at point blank is going to be hard enough to dodge at 600. Especially given there’s no tell on this.



Cold Shoulder:
So this one I’m fine with the idea behind it but the most important part to note is how does one resist it? So you mention having a higher class and/or higher OS but does resisting this mean you cannot encase them in the crystal? Or does it slow down? And if it slows down by how much does it slow down? Please expand on this.

Also instead of percentages I’d recommend we change this to limbs. Go for 1 limb a post in shikai, 2 per post in bankai (Must be connected. Meaning if you hit an arm you can encase the arm and the chest over the course of the post). The first limb being whichever you touched. From then having it spread out to your choice of the body. This can include the head or depending on what limb you interact with you could stop a fight altogether if you choose to encase their legs or arms. If you encase the head however this should start the 3 post count before suffocate.

Lastly I’d like this to be increased to 100 reiatsu per post.



Prelude to Pandemonium and Pandemonium Cometh:

So first question with the latter release technique does it use the orbs made with the Prelude ability? Or is it an entirely separate technique that just creates the shard from reiatsu used to fuel the technique?

Also how big is the orb made in Prelude? You’re compacting a rather sizeable beam into an orb.

We’ll tackle these techs once I understand them a bit more.



This seems to be everything I’ve got since everything else about the CIU is good. Like I said earlier though if you have any questions hit me up on Discord or on here. Either’s good.

[Miranda Frost]

Requested changes and adjustments have been dealt with.

[Ludwig Verrlicht]

Looks like you fixed everything we talked over. So I'll give this my 2/2