Dante Ghost Bellfire

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-Opening-

Member's Discord Name (include nicknames): [Ghost]

Password 1: Kitai's Debt

Password 2: Sanctus Teamwork

Type: Kenpachi

Squad: 3

Rank: 8

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-Basic Information-

Name: Dante Ghost Bellfire

Age of Death: 30

Real Age/Age of Appearance: 524/30

Birthday (Month/Day): 10/22

Blood Type: AB

RP Sample (Optional): [N/A]

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-Appearance-

Height/Weight: 6"00/180 Lbs

Physical Description: 
A brown-skinned man with white hair. He stands at six feet even and weighs in at one hundred eighty-five pounds. 
He does not have any scars on his body. He tends to shy away from wearing the Soul Reaper robes. But instead, opt to wear a different set of clothes. But he does where the overrobe Jack or coat. He has red eyes and straight teeth. Which are so white you would think they are fake. He tends to wear earrings that are shaped like the holy cross. 

He has army-thin combat boots as opposed to wearing sandals. He is a lean-built man and hardly has body fat. His hair is long enough to reach his back. But he keeps it braider up in two braids. He keeps his zanpaktou sealed on his right side hidden under his robe. 

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-Personality-

Dislikes: 
Bullies- never fight a weaker person you won't grow. 

Lack of willpower- Don't give up so easily there is still hope. 

Lack of Hope-If you can't hope then you can not dream. 

Rodents- no just keep them away from him. 

Lairs- Just keep it all the way truthful with him and there won't be any problems. 

Cheaters-Play fair or not at all you jerks.

Buzz killers- If you can't take a joke then the jokes are on you.

Likes: 

Jazz- The music for the soul. 

His Zanpaktou- The number 1 person to have his back. 

A Good Time- Everyone likes to have fun. It's food for the soul after all. 

Fashion- Yikes he loves clothes and not wearing that ugly soul reaper.

Fighting- He loves to fight especially since most lose to the power of his zanpaktou.

Flaws: 
He relies on his zanpantou a little too much. 

He prefers to work alone and usually does so. 

He tends to party a bit too much of a lazy boy and he's fine with that.

He tends to say things out loud that are not the best to be said out loud. 

He will jump into battle head-first when his loves are in danger.

He is very forgetful

Habits: 

He tends to bite his tongue when in a bad situation. 

He tends to arrive late to things for some odd reason. 

Time seems to slip away from him and he loses track of it. 

He is a lazy individual and tends to do things right but lazily. 

He tends to zone out on people's questions or things he finds boring. 

He loves to flirt with the ladies.



Fears: 

Not much fear him in terms of combat. 

Cold food wow imagine coming home from a long day at work and you a cold dinner waiting for you. 

Losing his loved ones. Although he never shows it he does care about the Gotei 13. 

Never being good enough to protect the order of peace. 

Never leaving up to the expectations he puts on himself. 

Getting turned down by the ladies. 

Goals: 
He has one single goal and that's to be the best to ever do it.
It is hard to pinpoint exactly what drives him. But he knows one thing for sure and that's that he will stop at nothing when he sets his eyes on something. 

Alignment: Chaotic Good

Overall Personality: 
Man life is something that's what my momma always said. So you want to know what goes on in my has my heart and in my soul. Ok cool, I'll let you in on what makes me well me. Understand that I am a down-to-earth laid-back kind of guy. I say it's best to take things easy and not overdo things.
People tend to get their draws in a brunch because of overdoing things but not I.

I talk with a cool and smooth tone of voice. I tend to look at reasoning and I am a hardcore realist.
That means I go with what needs to be done you know go with the flow type of guy. Now then with that being understood. Let's talk about how I act doing a fight. I won't really don't go all out unless I have to. As a matter of fact, I will let you take yourself out if anything.

Me drawing on the power of my sword rarely happens. That means you are a winner in the death lottery wouldn't you think? I really do dance to the beat of my drum and I hope the world will understand that. Especially since I don't like being told what to do. If you want to know more about me let's grab a bite and take more but it's on you. Because I am a cheapskate.

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-Powers-

Fighting Style: 
Hey, wasn't you paying attention it's more than you pay on your bills you know. But Ghost relies on his zanpaktou for most fights. As he uses his sword to fight. He prefers to go right for the can while his sword is in seal form.

As he finds it quite boring to try and prolong a fight. He tends to think things through however as he refuses to fight long battles. As he does not see the point in doing so. He is a well-balanced fighter so he can use. Whatever it is he needs to use to win.

He tends to talk down to his opponent or even give them credit if they did something good. On that note he he prefers not to use hand-to-hand combat.

However
Masked up: He gains more power with these and thus fights way better. So give or take he loves to troll people with this power. But he knows he is on a timer with it. So once the mask goes up. He becomes as serious as it gets. So having this mask on makes him fight unpredictably. As he becomes even more faster and stronger than any.


His true power comes from his Zapaktou ability. As its main theme allows him to cast illusions. Now the illusions are not Almighty however it does reverse one sense of direction and that my friend is why he rarely uses it. As it's not for the week to be used on. 


Zanpakutou Spirit Appearance:[/b] 
Leira looks takes after a classic Valkyrie. As she has fair skin with no battle marks. Her hair is extremely long as it touches her feet. On the right side of her hair. She has a white feather. She wears an all-white battle knight suit. Which she wears at all times. She is a lean built woman. Who has a pair of ten-foot wings? Which are pure black. She even carries around her unsealed zanpaktou form.

Unlike her User, she is an active being. As she is a very goal-driven spirit. She seeks only to help Ghost gain more power but his lack of effort truly angers her. Almost every time he visits his inner world. She starts a battle with him. With hopes of him gaining new heights in his power.

Inner World(Optional):[/b] 
Within his inner world, it takes the form of a Valhalla-themed throne room.
As Dante's inner spirit sits on this very throne. It is all an extremely tall stairway leading up to the throne. 
There are giant waterfalls on each side of it and all. Behind the throne room, it looks like utter space and the moon is singing high above. 
Zanpakutou Appearances: 
Leira looks like a woman from her youth with the classic Valkyrie armor. She has long jet silver hair which is just as long as the tower of stairs she sits upon. She wears a crown made up of feathers from a raven. She is extremely beautiful as her skin glows just like the night of a full moon. She also has Dragon wings as opposed to angelic-looking ones.

Shikai
Upon release, the Katana blade becomes jet black with red markings on it. As if the sword was still being forged in fire. The hilt now has the mark of the dragon as the crown of the sword. The sword still stays the same length it once was. However, smoking is now coming out of it as well.

As black fire covers the blade. A Chinese dragon which is 10 meters in length is now floating around Dante. However, the Dragon will vanish and only appear to defend and attack for Ghost. Each time he swings his sword the dragon will come forth. Or even when he defends himself the dragon would come forth.

Bankai
N/A



Zanapkutou Release Names(Include both Shikai and Bankai names, and call out phrases)



[Leira Gehinnom( Now Burn) / Leira Gehinnom MonringStar ( Now Burn) [BanKai]




Overall Ability: 
What is known about his Shikai is that he can control  ice and all moisture in the surrounding area. 




Shikai Overall Ability: 
His Shikai ability is simple as he can control Ice but at the moment that is all the information there is.

Bankai Overall Ability: N/A

Zanpakuto Techniques: N/A

Mask Appearance: 
Dante's mask takes the form of a panther. Its eyes give off an ocean blue and blood-red eye color. 

Other Techniques:

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Birthplace:

U.S.A wild West

Current Residence: Japan

Memorable Figures: Scar across his face. 

History:

Born in the wilds of the States back in its early stages. Dante had to learn to survive in a fast-paced. As he was without any family. The only family he knew was his grandfather. Who died after his eleventh birthday. Dante has been a mountain boy ever since. But he was not afraid of life. Growing up he knew what he was up against.

But truly he was tired of doing work day after day and just wanted a relaxing time. Unfortunately, he lost his life while out hunting one day. A panther ambushed him and took him down. Dante woke up in the soul society. He was going to enter the academy as soon as possible. As he wanted to become a captain. For years he trained his sword and became good with it.

Time after time he would learn kido but was not one for it. So he decided to train on how to counter them. Soon he would leave the school at the top of his class. Now that he is all set to make history known. What will the world bring for Dante? But deep inside of him something is lurking. Something that wants to come out and play. But what is it anyway?

[Holika]

Hi! I'm Yomi and I'm going to be doing your grading today. This is a test for me to reapply for Senior Grader status, as a fair warning. But don't be intimidated as I will be available at appropriate times to work with you through the grading process. On that note...

I have a few questions about this application to begin. I will list these buy number and reference the specifics in order of potentially most important.

1. Is this a Vizard Hopeful application? If it is, the site has a ruling that the application must be of the same substance as that of a Class 1 character. So for Dislikes, Likes, Flaws, Fear and Habits you need at least 10 in each category and a paragraph or two for each individual item in said category. You would need at least 3 Goals and two paragraphs explaining each goal and why your character would want to achieve these goals. 

2. The description of your character's physical body should be at least eight full paragraphs with some fleshed out detail at a minimum. You can split these up by describing their hair, body shape and maneuverability (like if they have a usual limp or tic), their clothes, what they look like in different stages of release or the appearance of their clothes during different parts of the fight due to how they handle the current scenario. Like, they might take off their top if they're hot and sweaty as a possibility. But you have to structure them and make the paragraphs properly. Two or three sentences will not constitute a paragraph. I usually make mine around five to eight sentences.


3. Your History is severely lacking for an average character that is looking to pass, and for a Vizard Hopeful I am confident this does not meet the requirements. You would need to flesh out further, dig up some real information for your character and write a full 20 paragraphs.

4. For your Shikai and Bankai there is not much to say. And that is because there is not much there to work with at this point. The site would prefer that you include more detail about the powers of your shikai and bankai be listed, but you need the shikai at a minimum. What are the techniques that your shikai can muster? What does it do in more detail? Controlling ice and water in the area around you is a good beginning idea, but what are the number and the parameters behind it? Can you control all moisture in the county area? The state? The country? Define what your area means. 

5. Vizard Hopeful can not be Kenpachi. If you are attempting to be a Vizard Hopeful, drop the Kenpachi and choose another type. If you are looking to be a Kenpachi, lose the mask and submit this without it listed. Also, you need to remove your releases as Kenpachi cannot have these. 

6. I think you mistook Memorable Figures with Memorable Features which you can include if you wish. But a Memorable Figure would be another RPC or an NPC that was significant to your character.

7. Your overall Personality is lacking as well. I can tell you went with an interesting approach from the character's perspective talking directly to the reader which is refreshing. However, you are going to need more detail and paragraphs for their look on certain scenarios. How do they handle a fight? Do they prefer to eat out or cook for themselves? These are suggestion to think on for how you might add some detail to this character's life and general personality.

8. For your description, you have contradicted yourself with the Memorable Figures area. Your character does not have a scar on their body yet has a memorable scar on their face. Also, there should probably be more description of their features.

All in all, this application needs some serious work in order to pass site minimums. Especially if this is a Vizard Hopeful application. I wish you the best of luck and will be available if you need some help in meeting the minimum standards in order to pass your character's grading. I would also suggest looking at other approved characters that fit what you wish to accomplish, in this case a Vizard Hopeful and reading up in detail the Type you wish to have in order to correctly match what is permitted on the site.

In other words, I suggest possibly remaking this character, mark this as a Work In Progress, W.I.P., in the title of this character and finish it with a site minimums before reporting for Grading. Best of Luck!


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