Post by Ludwig Verrlicht on Mar 26, 2021 16:17:27 GMT -5
Alright Faust I shall be grading you’re CIU. Let’s get this show on the road shall we?
Bankai / Captaincy:
Now correct me if I’m wrong but I believe you were already approved for bankai and captain so I’m going to skip these.
Powers:
Overall:
Alright so heat absorption is the name of the game eh? Fair enough. So with regards to water / liquid abilities I’m ok with this being an increased OS necessary to remain just that. Makes sense. My problem comes from what you said about heat being removed from existence before stat alteration. Gonna just go with no, your ability to remove heat from existence that is controlled by another (I.E. a fire user) clashes after all stat modifications. Positive or Negative. And then if it’s less than your current OS can it be consumed.
Moving onto what happens when you hit absolute zero in a given area, I agree that everything else stops moving. However if a character for whatever reason decides to walk through I’d like to see something written up about how long until they basically freeze to death. Because they become the new heat source, and unlike yourself, will transfer heat to the area around them. I’d expect there to be consequences and that Cold Tolerance will play a part in this as well as the users OS or even a means of paying reiatsu to enable them to move. But something has to be here especially if your sword comes in contact with another person and you start outright stealing their body heat / energy.
Shikai Overall:
Alright so not much here for obvious reasons. However I’d like to see some ranges for how far your winds reach. And then we know that the winds eat 100C a post which means in a given area you hit absolute zero in about 3ish posts. So what I’d like to see is something that states how long your winds stay in an area. I assume the 5ft area around you moves with you so that’s one thing but nothing here suggests the winds stay present in any given area to actually allow the area to become an absolute zero zone. And then obviously if they stick around there needs to be a way to beat your winds so I’d like ya to add a means to beat the static winds if they remain present in an area. And how long said winds stay present in the area, even if your intention is for them to remain indefinitely I just wanna have that in writing.
Shikai Techs:
1. Frozen Shuffle
Ahh thunder step but the frozen addition, I’m surprisingly ok with this. However this needs a few things, first and foremost a cost because this sure as shit won’t be a costless ability. I’d also like a range limit for this ability as far as the teleportation is concerned. Otherwise as a concept this is fine and a 15 foot AoE blast after teleporting is fine.
2. Cutting Chill:
Alright so like the last tech I like the idea in concept but we’ve gotta get some drawbacks written in. Firstly I need a cost for this, which should be doubled minimum in bankai given it affects your entire bankai, and then I’d like a cooldown until you can use it again. 1-2 posts should be ok.
Also are these visible or does another need a certain amount of senses to realize what you’ve done? Because this currently implies the victims won’t know what’s going on but they will be getting cut so long as they stand there. And while I assume this uses your highest OS would you mind writing that down somewhere on here?
Last but not least does this affect Wycliff at all? Assuming he’s walking in his own winds this could hurt him too since they are just frozen blades in the air and even being at 98F wouldn’t immediately melt them while he’s walking through.
3. Frozen Twister:
Another good concept but we need to get some things written in. Again I need to see an initial cost for this ability and what the cost will be per post. I’d also like to see a limit to how many twisters he can maintain at a time. I’d also like to see a distance he can control these up to. With regards to bankai I’d assume this is something he could control at any given point in it. Lastly, where is he able to create them at? Does he have to create them from his person or can he create them anywhere he wants?
Bankai Overall:
Alright Elsa let’s see what we can’t do with this. First things first I’d like to see is something about how someone can see more than just slabs of white. I understand what a whiteout is but there are still some tells of what’s around so with people who have high senses I’d like for them to have a way to see what’s all going on easier. Not 100% like normal but enough to work with it. I’m thinking 300-400 Senses should be fine. As for the ability to change the color of other techs
As for the energy sensory whiteout effect I’d like to see some hard numbers. For most people even if they attempted to sense him I completely agree that they wouldn’t be able to. It’s a clustered storm of his energy. However people with high enough ES should be able to tell where he’s at, his reiatsu attacks, etc. I’d expect something like anti-stealth, focused eye, or something else should make this somewhat easier for them to find him. As well as if they use a radar technique. To just name a few.
One question also so you mention Wycliff is not affected by the whiteout portion of his bankai. Totally fine. However you mention he doesn’t see the snow and ice all over the place. But is he still affected by this? Affected in terms of that if he got pushed on a bit of ice he’d slide around or someone picked up some snow and threw it at him, he’d still be pelted with a face full of snow. If not I’d like to change this. By all means does he none of the drawbacks of existing in it but he does need to still experience what he’s producing.
Also don’t forget to add in any effects about how cold tolerance and the like that I asked about in the shikai / overall section work. I expect these to be upgraded but I’d still like to see them unless it’s the same in shikai and bankai.
Bankai Techs:
4. Frost Animation:
Alright so a fair and interesting concept on the whole but we need some drawbacks on this and some explanations. First and foremost I want a stat spread for this summon since this is more than the simple creations that Wycliff could make via his Bankai overall. Then I need to see a cost and upkeep cost. Both preferably somewhat hefty because you’re asking for it to do a good few things. Also I’d like to see a limit to how many of these you can make. I’d expect it to be one but I could be convinced to allow up to 2 maximum.
Next I’m good for allowing it to use your kido and other techs however the drawbacks, and I’m looking at kido and other reiatsu techs, should still come back to you. So if a kido says your arm gets burnt it isn’t the construct that burns it’s your arm.
Now for the construct to be repaired, I’m completely fine with minor wounds being effectively “regenerated” by just existing. Cuts, scrapes, “bruises”, etc. But major wounds or in the event that say it loses a limb I’d like to see a cost to repair it. This doesn’t need to be a lot as you’re replacing snow, ice, etc but I’d like to see something.
Now the last thing is your escape death aspect. I don’t feel like this should be in your tech. It doesn’t really fit in with your power as a whole and it seems a bit much when you add in what else this construct can do since you damn near make a perfect clone. So I’m going to ask that you remove this last fail safe ability from this technique.
5. Lost in the Snow:
Oh shit son we have drawbacks and costs on this technique. 1/5 so far, this is good. So I’m ok with this but we need to change and make sure a few things are mentioned. Firstly after having made certain with other staff your bankai cannot affect your physicality. So the original Wycliff cannot be made of snow, ice, etc. But I don’t expect him to really care since it shouldn't make a noticeable difference.
Now as far as your ability to hide your presence I’m ok with the per post cost. However the necessary stats need to be dropped to 400. And from that point on the Anti-Stealth needs to decrease it by 50 points for a minimum of 200. More than most but low enough that others could see it if they aren’t ES investors. (I.E. prodigy, genius, strategist, etc.) I’d also like to add Focused Eye to this with the same effect.
6. Unleash it all:
So while this seems a bit of an odd ball ultimate, given the power set as a whole, we’ve gotta do a few changes to this. Now I’m ok with the idea of having this technique scale based on how much energy you’ve collected but we are going to cap it at 3x OS. There’s no reason you should have much more than that. Now the rate at which your OS increases for this attack is fine where it’s at so we don’t have to change that.
However what we do need to change is your bankai wide AoE aspect. That’s not happen. A free instant hit that’s based around how long you’ve been released? Especially when you can hide away for most of your bankai? Not happening. But the idea of doing a large AoE I can get behind this. I’ll let you decide how large you want it and if you even want to keep the attack as a point blank explosion but it’s not going to be bankai wide.
Furthermore we are going to need a fairly large reiatsu cost for this. Especially because it doesn’t follow your OS and can get to the 3x limit.
Alright this looks to be about everything. As usual if you have any questions and the like feel free to hit me up. However I’d like whatever you change to be written in your next post. Especially if it’s something different from what was talked about in this post.
Bankai / Captaincy:
Now correct me if I’m wrong but I believe you were already approved for bankai and captain so I’m going to skip these.
Powers:
Overall:
Alright so heat absorption is the name of the game eh? Fair enough. So with regards to water / liquid abilities I’m ok with this being an increased OS necessary to remain just that. Makes sense. My problem comes from what you said about heat being removed from existence before stat alteration. Gonna just go with no, your ability to remove heat from existence that is controlled by another (I.E. a fire user) clashes after all stat modifications. Positive or Negative. And then if it’s less than your current OS can it be consumed.
Moving onto what happens when you hit absolute zero in a given area, I agree that everything else stops moving. However if a character for whatever reason decides to walk through I’d like to see something written up about how long until they basically freeze to death. Because they become the new heat source, and unlike yourself, will transfer heat to the area around them. I’d expect there to be consequences and that Cold Tolerance will play a part in this as well as the users OS or even a means of paying reiatsu to enable them to move. But something has to be here especially if your sword comes in contact with another person and you start outright stealing their body heat / energy.
Shikai Overall:
Alright so not much here for obvious reasons. However I’d like to see some ranges for how far your winds reach. And then we know that the winds eat 100C a post which means in a given area you hit absolute zero in about 3ish posts. So what I’d like to see is something that states how long your winds stay in an area. I assume the 5ft area around you moves with you so that’s one thing but nothing here suggests the winds stay present in any given area to actually allow the area to become an absolute zero zone. And then obviously if they stick around there needs to be a way to beat your winds so I’d like ya to add a means to beat the static winds if they remain present in an area. And how long said winds stay present in the area, even if your intention is for them to remain indefinitely I just wanna have that in writing.
Shikai Techs:
1. Frozen Shuffle
Ahh thunder step but the frozen addition, I’m surprisingly ok with this. However this needs a few things, first and foremost a cost because this sure as shit won’t be a costless ability. I’d also like a range limit for this ability as far as the teleportation is concerned. Otherwise as a concept this is fine and a 15 foot AoE blast after teleporting is fine.
2. Cutting Chill:
Alright so like the last tech I like the idea in concept but we’ve gotta get some drawbacks written in. Firstly I need a cost for this, which should be doubled minimum in bankai given it affects your entire bankai, and then I’d like a cooldown until you can use it again. 1-2 posts should be ok.
Also are these visible or does another need a certain amount of senses to realize what you’ve done? Because this currently implies the victims won’t know what’s going on but they will be getting cut so long as they stand there. And while I assume this uses your highest OS would you mind writing that down somewhere on here?
Last but not least does this affect Wycliff at all? Assuming he’s walking in his own winds this could hurt him too since they are just frozen blades in the air and even being at 98F wouldn’t immediately melt them while he’s walking through.
3. Frozen Twister:
Another good concept but we need to get some things written in. Again I need to see an initial cost for this ability and what the cost will be per post. I’d also like to see a limit to how many twisters he can maintain at a time. I’d also like to see a distance he can control these up to. With regards to bankai I’d assume this is something he could control at any given point in it. Lastly, where is he able to create them at? Does he have to create them from his person or can he create them anywhere he wants?
Bankai Overall:
Alright Elsa let’s see what we can’t do with this. First things first I’d like to see is something about how someone can see more than just slabs of white. I understand what a whiteout is but there are still some tells of what’s around so with people who have high senses I’d like for them to have a way to see what’s all going on easier. Not 100% like normal but enough to work with it. I’m thinking 300-400 Senses should be fine. As for the ability to change the color of other techs
As for the energy sensory whiteout effect I’d like to see some hard numbers. For most people even if they attempted to sense him I completely agree that they wouldn’t be able to. It’s a clustered storm of his energy. However people with high enough ES should be able to tell where he’s at, his reiatsu attacks, etc. I’d expect something like anti-stealth, focused eye, or something else should make this somewhat easier for them to find him. As well as if they use a radar technique. To just name a few.
One question also so you mention Wycliff is not affected by the whiteout portion of his bankai. Totally fine. However you mention he doesn’t see the snow and ice all over the place. But is he still affected by this? Affected in terms of that if he got pushed on a bit of ice he’d slide around or someone picked up some snow and threw it at him, he’d still be pelted with a face full of snow. If not I’d like to change this. By all means does he none of the drawbacks of existing in it but he does need to still experience what he’s producing.
Also don’t forget to add in any effects about how cold tolerance and the like that I asked about in the shikai / overall section work. I expect these to be upgraded but I’d still like to see them unless it’s the same in shikai and bankai.
Bankai Techs:
4. Frost Animation:
Alright so a fair and interesting concept on the whole but we need some drawbacks on this and some explanations. First and foremost I want a stat spread for this summon since this is more than the simple creations that Wycliff could make via his Bankai overall. Then I need to see a cost and upkeep cost. Both preferably somewhat hefty because you’re asking for it to do a good few things. Also I’d like to see a limit to how many of these you can make. I’d expect it to be one but I could be convinced to allow up to 2 maximum.
Next I’m good for allowing it to use your kido and other techs however the drawbacks, and I’m looking at kido and other reiatsu techs, should still come back to you. So if a kido says your arm gets burnt it isn’t the construct that burns it’s your arm.
Now for the construct to be repaired, I’m completely fine with minor wounds being effectively “regenerated” by just existing. Cuts, scrapes, “bruises”, etc. But major wounds or in the event that say it loses a limb I’d like to see a cost to repair it. This doesn’t need to be a lot as you’re replacing snow, ice, etc but I’d like to see something.
Now the last thing is your escape death aspect. I don’t feel like this should be in your tech. It doesn’t really fit in with your power as a whole and it seems a bit much when you add in what else this construct can do since you damn near make a perfect clone. So I’m going to ask that you remove this last fail safe ability from this technique.
5. Lost in the Snow:
Oh shit son we have drawbacks and costs on this technique. 1/5 so far, this is good. So I’m ok with this but we need to change and make sure a few things are mentioned. Firstly after having made certain with other staff your bankai cannot affect your physicality. So the original Wycliff cannot be made of snow, ice, etc. But I don’t expect him to really care since it shouldn't make a noticeable difference.
Now as far as your ability to hide your presence I’m ok with the per post cost. However the necessary stats need to be dropped to 400. And from that point on the Anti-Stealth needs to decrease it by 50 points for a minimum of 200. More than most but low enough that others could see it if they aren’t ES investors. (I.E. prodigy, genius, strategist, etc.) I’d also like to add Focused Eye to this with the same effect.
6. Unleash it all:
So while this seems a bit of an odd ball ultimate, given the power set as a whole, we’ve gotta do a few changes to this. Now I’m ok with the idea of having this technique scale based on how much energy you’ve collected but we are going to cap it at 3x OS. There’s no reason you should have much more than that. Now the rate at which your OS increases for this attack is fine where it’s at so we don’t have to change that.
However what we do need to change is your bankai wide AoE aspect. That’s not happen. A free instant hit that’s based around how long you’ve been released? Especially when you can hide away for most of your bankai? Not happening. But the idea of doing a large AoE I can get behind this. I’ll let you decide how large you want it and if you even want to keep the attack as a point blank explosion but it’s not going to be bankai wide.
Furthermore we are going to need a fairly large reiatsu cost for this. Especially because it doesn’t follow your OS and can get to the 3x limit.
Alright this looks to be about everything. As usual if you have any questions and the like feel free to hit me up. However I’d like whatever you change to be written in your next post. Especially if it’s something different from what was talked about in this post.
