Ken'ichi Shihoin [Squad 12 Vice Captain]

[Deleted]

Jul 20, 2020: Made minor edits to two posts in this application in order to reinsert images that had been removed due to dead links. I found backups of the images squirreled away in a backup folder in my PC. No other changes were made.

Aug 13, 2020: Fixed some minor typos and one formatting error (missing font color in Appearance) with Col's permission.

[Kyomei Kuchiki]

Sorry for the long wait, I'll jump right in and give my thoughts as I go.

Overall, solidly build beautifully organized app. While I have some reservations about some of Ken'ichi's personality points (like his Pervert Flaw) I don't see anything that needs outright adjusted. His threads will probably need higher Ratings than most normal threads, but that's up to interpretation and discussion between you and your thread partners.

Moving straight into Powers, then.

" it also simultaneously allows her to heal her injuries by absorbing at least 5'cu of liquefied material into her body. Ten no Suigin Shin Ryū can only heal herself in this way a maximum of once per post, and each time beyond the first costs Ken'ichi 100 Reiatsu. " From Bankai Overall Ability. Dumb question, but is 5'cu five cubic feet or cubic inches or cubic meters? I forget. So I'm going to guess five cubic feet and balance from there until corrected. (Also, I'm noticing that the ' is present in more than one measurement such as in Shikai overall Ability second paragraph, so it's important that I understand what size you intended.)

I think that the power of healing available to a massive Bankai should cost a bit more Reiatsu than 100. If it only takes 5 feet of material, when one strike even in Shikai can yield 10 feet of material, then I would scale Reiatsu cost to 400. If it required more material, such as equivalent to the size of the damage with a maximum of 20 cubic feet healed at once then I could justify 250 Reiatsu cost for a tremendous healing potential. It should also not have a Free healing per post, should cost Reiatsu no matter how many times it's used per post.

"Boasting equal intelligence to Ken'ichi, Ten no Suigin Shin Ryū can utilize any of his skills and techniques as if they were her own. This is not surprising as she is but an extension of his zanpakutou manifested as a separate entity." Skills, yes, Techniques, I'm not so sure about. The Construct using Kidou or Hoho could get unbalanced very quickly. I'm fine with the Construct using Ken'ichi's skills though. That would be easily explained by the shared consciousness.

"During Bankai, Ken'ichi remains armed with an enhanced version of his Shikai weapon, and will swiftly dart about the battlefield," Is the enhancement to the Shikai weapon detailed somewhere? I think I missed it.


Techniques:

I'm guessing that the name Hane Yaiba is the command word for the latter uses of the technique, but I don't see it expressly stated. Just nit picky, I guess, but I'd like to know the command word given the level of the detail of the app and it's interesting to me. I find myself wanting to know more about the character as I read more.

The 20% reiatsu strength boost in this technique doesn't really make a lot of sense to me as we try to limit buffs for the sake of buffs. I would simply remove the buff in Offensive Strength and instead grant a little more control over the feathers, such as a curving path or a sharp turn after a set described distance as a bonus for telegraphing the move.


"Regardless of the form his zanpakutou takes, Ken'ichi remains equally skilled in its use, treating his Sword skill as an appropriate skill at the same rank (eg. Spears, Axes, etc). This does not extend to the use of weapons outside his zanpakutou however, and is a unique property of this technique." At minimum there should be a decrease in Skill Rank for converting SKP between forms fluidly. Skill in Swords should not be able to be converted to Spears or Axes at equal rank. I know in the past we've flat out rejected abilities that did this, and I'm willing to reconsider my stance on it with further discussion between myself and Col or Sana (preferably Col as he handled the first grading). At the moment though, I wouldn't be comfortable with Ken'ichi getting Mastery or even Special Mastery of literally any weapon just from costing 50 reiatsu.

Your Bankai techniques have appropriate Reiatsu cost for the level of power.

I'll be honest, in wanting to get this grading done tonight I scrolled through the History and found it sufficient length for the level of Power Tier you have requested.

Sorry again for the long wait, I'll be as quick as possible in resolving the responses.

[Deleted]

Aug 17, 2020 21:25:26 GMT -5 Kyomei Kuchiki said:

Moving straight into Powers, then.

" it also simultaneously allows her to heal her injuries by absorbing at least 5'cu of liquefied material into her body. Ten no Suigin Shin Ryū can only heal herself in this way a maximum of once per post, and each time beyond the first costs Ken'ichi 100 Reiatsu. " From Bankai Overall Ability. Dumb question, but is 5'cu five cubic feet or cubic inches or cubic meters? I forget. So I'm going to guess five cubic feet and balance from there until corrected. (Also, I'm noticing that the ' is present in more than one measurement such as in Shikai overall Ability second paragraph, so it's important that I understand what size you intended.) [SNIP]

I deleted the healing ability.

"Boasting equal intelligence to Ken'ichi, Ten no Suigin Shin Ryū can utilize any of his skills and techniques as if they were her own. This is not surprising as she is but an extension of his zanpakutou manifested as a separate entity." Skills, yes, Techniques, I'm not so sure about. The Construct using Kidou or Hoho could get unbalanced very quickly. I'm fine with the Construct using Ken'ichi's skills though. That would be easily explained by the shared consciousness.

I added the missing word "zanpakutou" clarifying this only applied to zan techs.

"During Bankai, Ken'ichi remains armed with an enhanced version of his Shikai weapon, and will swiftly dart about the battlefield," Is the enhancement to the Shikai weapon detailed somewhere? I think I missed it.

Clarified that the shikai weapon is now class 2, and that ken'ichi can use enhanced Bankai versions of his shikai techniques.

I'm guessing that the name Hane Yaiba is the command word for the latter uses of the technique, but I don't see it expressly stated.

Yes.

The 20% reiatsu strength boost in this technique doesn't really make a lot of sense to me as we try to limit buffs for the sake of buffs. I would simply remove the buff in Offensive Strength and instead grant a little more control over the feathers, such as a curving path or a sharp turn after a set described distance as a bonus for telegraphing the move.

Changed it as you suggested.

"Regardless of the form his zanpakutou takes, Ken'ichi remains equally skilled in its use, treating his Sword skill as an appropriate skill at the same rank (eg. Spears, Axes, etc). This does not extend to the use of weapons outside his zanpakutou however, and is a unique property of this technique." At minimum there should be a decrease in Skill Rank for converting SKP between forms fluidly. Skill in Swords should not be able to be converted to Spears or Axes at equal rank. I know in the past we've flat out rejected abilities that did this, and I'm willing to reconsider my stance on it with further discussion between myself and Col or Sana (preferably Col as he handled the first grading). At the moment though, I wouldn't be comfortable with Ken'ichi getting Mastery or even Special Mastery of literally any weapon just from costing 50 reiatsu.

Capped it at rank 3 in Other Weapons.

[Kyomei Kuchiki]

If ittou suigin is capped at rank 3 for other weapons mastery, the cost would need to be 100 reiatsu for me to approve it. If that's changed, the app will be 2/2 approved for class 1 Vice Captain without Bankai at 1600 sp.

[Deleted]

Made that change (reiatsu of ittou suigin is now 100);

- Added stats/skills.

- Added code sections for ease of CiU (please do not delete).

- 100% completed. You can move Ken'ichi to accepted whenever convenient.

[Deleted]

Noticed a minor math error that made the char unplayable. Strength 50 after cuts during sealed would = strength 20. I accidentally mathed it to being 30 (60% of base not a 60% cut).

Can I fix the error by boosting base str to 100 (+50SP), and cutting base Sensory to 125 and ES to 25 (-50SP). Sorry for the inconvenience.

I actually made this change a few min ago, but changed it back.

[Deleted]

Character Name: Ken'ichi Shihoin

Type Change: Soul Spec v1 > Updated Cunning Type (Rank 2, unchanged).

The new cunning type represents the kind of character I always wanted for Ken'ichi, but did not exist previously.

New Stats: To reflect the type change, I am adjusting Ken'ichi's Stats as follows (replace existing stats with the following):

• Strength: [250] x 0.6 (150)
• Speed: [400] x 1.0 (400)
  
  
• Reiatsu Strength: [250] x 0.6 (150)
• Spiritual Pressure: [400] x 1.75 (700)
  
  Reiatsu [7000]
  
  
• Instinct: [200] x 1.75 (350)
• Senses: [50] x 1.0 (50)
• Energy Sensory: [50] x 1.0 (50)
  
  
• Healing Expertise: [0]
• Light Aura: [55]
• Dark Aura: [45]
  
  
• Total SP: [1600] 

Skill Adjustments: Due to the type granting +2SKP in Analysis, I am spending the existing 2SKP I have in that skill to increase Weapons (Sword) from 3SKP to 4SKP. This will max my available 6SKP in Body/Combat skills (Weapon 4, Hakuda 1)

New Powers: None. However, due to the change in OS from Reiatsu Strength to Spiritual Pressure - I would like to make a slight modification to the wording of my release.

The existing release involves a clash between Ken'ichi's Reiatsu Strength vs. the Opponent's RS. I would like to alter the wording slightly, to say that it is a clash between Ken'ichi's Spiritual Pressure vs. the Opponent's RS. If the opponent is released, they may instead use the better of their RS or Sppr to resolve this clash. 

There are multiple instances where this is mentioned, and rather than posting the entire mammoth release here with only a couple wording changes, I thought I would just indicate the intent for the release tweak is to align with the new OS.

This wording change will be reflected in my Point Bank (which includes a copy of my Release). If required, I can copy/paste the full updated text here upon request.

What kind of update: Type Change, Stat Update, and Slight tweak to Release wording to reflect new OS.