Hiro Hajime (Utterly Rejected)

[taicho]

-Basic Information-

Password 1: Pumpkin Mash

Password 2: Bean sprout

Name: Hiro Hajime

Age of Death: 22

Age of Appearance: 25

Real Age: 900

Blood Type: O -

Fighting Style: Strategic

-Appearance-

Height: 5'7 1/2

Weight: 155

Eye Color: Piercing blue

Overall Appearance: Upon laying your eyes upon the teacher's figure, you will notice off the bat one accessory he seems to never take off. That accessory being an old leather eye patch. The eye patch itself is the common black color, but sewn together, with gold and crimson thread. The straps are hidden beneath his hair and tie in the back of the head. Some of his more 'creative' students would say that it is sewn into his face, but all of them are wrong. His face itself shows a rough look, something you would see from a farm boy, or a warrior. Locks of silver hair trail down his face until it reaches just above the base of the neck, and just over the eyes. Now you would think, hey thats not smart, when you are teaching a class, you wont be able to see a thing right? Wrong. The style that Heero uses in his hair is actually almost a strategy. Most kids would think the teacher cat see us so lets pass notes! Or whatever it is that is against academy policy. He uses that Hairstyle to weed out the trouble makers, by deliberately letting them try and get away with what they are doing, and then he would come and direct them out of class, after seeing what they were up to.

Watery Blue eyes grace the mans face, always portraying perfectly what he feels during his classes, which nearly all the time is a sense of complete and utter contentedness. Never closing and always wide, Heero relies on the eyes so he can take in what the world around him is like. To accent the usually happy light shown in his eyes, Heero is often caught with a radiant smile that seems to be able to lighten anyones day. heero is fair skinned, he has no tan even though he holds his classes outdoors. Being in top physical health, heerosbody build is muscular, but not body builder muscular. He has a well toned body, which makes him seem a bit more intimidating than normal. Often he uses this to his advantage when dealing with the 'tough guys' or 'macho men' in his classes. Back to his face, when and if he ever removed his eye patch, underneath is something rather shocking. A scar where his eye was, is what you will see. All you can see beneath the eye patch is scar tissue. His eye had been forcibly sewn shut after a casualty in a past battle when he was still within a Gotei division.

His attire, is actually not very reflective of his personality. Instead of wearing the traditional shinigami garb, he wears completely different clothing. In his trips to the modern world, (which are quite often) he buys formal attire from stores all through Karakura. Most often he buys neutral colored shirts which range from muted reds, to darker blues and greens, to blacks, grays and whites. These shirts are very formal, as they are the same kind of shirts that modern teachers wear. His ties are usually nothing special. Almost all would be black with the exception of a few colored ones, he wears on special occasions. His pants like his ties are black dress pants. His shoes are like the rest of his uniform. A Pair of black shoes, that are made of leather. But this is the attire he wears to the academy only. His attire that he wears out of the academy, like his other clothing is modern and well just different from anyone else in Seireitei. When not seen in the school, he is wearing a t-shirt with a pair of jeans. It's this attire that shows off his rather happy demeanor. Him being called an oddity isn't an understatement, as its extremely rare to see him even work in a shinigami uniform.

During his passing there are a few items he didn’t let go of, even when being konsoed. One of them was a pair of handcuffs that he had been restrained in when he was kept as a convict. The cuffs themselves haven't rusted one bit since he was konsoed. Another accessory that he wears all the time, which shows his pride when he was a military officer in the living world. Apart from his accessories, Heerocarries quite a few physical quirks with him. One being that since he was a military officer, he walks with a more confident aura even when surrounded with kids and students that seem like a hopeless cause. When seen in shinigami attire, it is usually a dire situation for soul society. His uniform is missing the sleeves of the Kimono top, but most everyone knows whom he was before leaving for the academy. His uniform is black but tattered on the pant legs. His obi is also black blending with his uniform.

In the many times he goes to the human world to well either shop, or research different teaching strategies, Heero's clothing is rather bright as well. Sporting a pair of white sneakers, and a pair of black cargo shorts. For shirts, well he leans toward the reds and oranges. Usually on the backs of his shirt show the symbol of a mask that is comparable to a hollow mask, making spiritually aware humans, that know of the shinigami, just who he is. Heero doesn't care if the spiritually aware humans know whom he is, after all they do fight along side each other more and more. Now though, Heero tends to carry his Zanpakutou more than usual, seeing as now there are constant threats of arrancar and many other enemies.

-Personality-

Dislikes: Annoying people, lazy people

Likes: Shy girls,sake,training

Flaws: Doubts himself.

Habits: Bites nails.

Fears: Losing someone close, failing his squad.

Goals: Get married, Asscend to squad 0

Alignment: Chaotic good

Overall Personality: Heero is explicitly a boisterous fellow, constantly aiming to help in any way he could possibly think of. More often than not, he vexes people with his almost robot likeness when it comes to lending a hand. You could compare this fellow to a dog almost, undyingly loyal, and would rather die than let his fellow superiors get hurt. Often showing every possible emotion on his face, the rather energetic and optimistic man known as Heero would first be thought of as immature, or irresponsible. In his true nature, he is almost like a fatherly figure, despite his apparent childishness. But within this mans mind is a bunch of facets to a personality that is much more complicated for others to understand. In many ways his childishness seems to be somewhat of a shield to prevent the more "unhappy" parts of life rule his mind. He is a deep thinker and is able to calculate a usually foolproof plan to defeat opponents. Because of this abnormal thinking capacity, he left his court guard squad in order to teach newcomers in the academy.

When you look upon his face, the emotions portrayed would paint a picture of what he’s attitude portrays. A face of light, and energy is what he brings with him, and his rather optimistic demeanor. Always accented by the trademark grin that always seems to have an ability to brighten anyone’s day. Along with his optimism, there is a tricky side that seems to love to pull off jokes in class and just make sure everyone enjoys what they are learning and knows it by heart. His train of thought is similar to the enlightened thoughts of John Locke. He believes that the spirits in Seireitei are Naturally good, but let themselves fall prey to the many temptations of life in Soul Society. His thoughts also reflect the fact that he is well respected in the field of education being that the students he teaches, seem to have higher rates of achieving their shikai within the first two years of graduation. Being a teacher, his methods of presenting the material needed to be learned are quite unorthodox. Instead pf your average textbook and paper lesson, he takes his students out into the world to see the thing in real life. To show them everything that a book cant.

Even with his rather odd way of teaching and his extreme exuberance, there are a few rare times where he buckles down and shows the kids just who is boss, and that he is not there to be their best friend. But to teach them and get them through the course he teaches. The course that he runs is a kendo and swordsmanship class. Heero has a love for the art of the sword and it shows in the way he teaches. Pride, though he doesn't have much, he does show pride in his work, and he shown the contentedness he has with being a teacher of the newest shinigami arrivals. Despite his main course that he teaches being kendo and swordsmanship, he does run a kidou class for people that he picks out to have potential for going into the kidou corps or getting a higher seat in the fifth, and training them. You could call this class his Advanced placement class that he seems to lighten up in. In general though, he shows and equal liking to the classes he teaches and doesn't favor one over another, being that he knows exactly what it is like to have someone liked more than you.

But behind all of the exuberance, there is someone in pain, someone that is hidden and will be kept hidden. That person in pain is the true Heero. Even after being konsoed, the spirit remembers his human life and the pain of knowing what happened over and over. Seeing it replay in his head leads him into times of depression. During these times He takes a leave of absence from his classes, knowing full well that his depression leads him to be angry with himself, but he takes it out upon others. And whence he does this, he often feels a large amount of guilt. Guilt is a feeling that Well Heero does not cope well with either. When dealing with this emotion it depends on whom he hurt. If it was a student, he most often would write a letter apologizing to the student for unjust and immature acts. Whilst if he hurt a colleague, he would go out of his way to make sure that got that day off, and he would make sure he had no work for that day. When he works himself like this, well, he becomes stressed and goes to train. With Heero these emotions are like a vicious circle, and it would never end.

Heero Has Many personality strengths, one being the way he treats those deemed as enemies. When faced in a stare down with an enemy, he does not act offensively unless it is an absolutely necessary to act out. He will Usually try to either talk to the enemy and convince her or she to leave the area because even if they were an arrancar, he does not deem them bad unless they have attacked. If one enemy were to attack him first, Heero becomes extremely serious and will do everything within his power to destroy or drive away the enemy with the least amount of blood possible. When and if the enemy deems to fight to the death then Heero will do all in his power to fulfill that wish and fight until the enemy was destroyed. But, If the enemy retreats when they are talked to, then Heero treats them with a little more respect if he were to run into them ever again.

For His superiors within Seireitei, such as the nobility, and the Sou-taichou, Heero becomes almost the exact opposite of his flamboyant, and exuberant self that he displays in his classrooms. When he is called to a meeting with those above him he becomes extremely serious, knowing full well that he was called there e because something bad was going on and his home was in a dire need for help. He treats all those above with the utmost respect and seriousness. Along with those below him he listens intently and will not speak a word of objection or suggestion until the very end. Now most would call that a respectful thing, but for him he is thinking and calculating a plan of attack, defense, or both to help keep his home free from harm. It is shown rather easily Heero has no problem with dying for his home. His Heart and soul literally belong to his home and so he would do anything even if that means dying to keep his home and friends and family safe.

A person that is never one to dwell on things, Heero looks to the future. He sees the future as a beckon of hope, telling him to carry on and hold strong despite his internal weaknesses, he thinks of the future as that light at the end of the tunnel that he is nearing ever closer to. All in all, Heero is a man of many words that enjoys his job as a teacher and as a person though having problems dealing with certain memories, is all around congenial and kind to his students colleagues and friends.

[taicho]

-Powers-

Zanpakutou Sealed Appearance: Hiro's zanpaktou looks to be a long daito fused with a jian sword. This sword is much longer than a katana and use to take out a large field of warriors. A daito sword is use with two hands to be use at its full potential. Since the blade is stronger than a katana in strength. The blade's color is a metal light Grey color. While the guard is shape like that of butterfly-shaped iron frame that surrounds the wavy stained-glass wings.. THise are some markings on the guard and they connect to each otHis, making the blade look like an ancient weapon. While the hilt of the blade is described as a ocean blue coloring and shines brightly with the light, the blade size is that of a long stick bar. THise are some teal blue pieces attached on both sides of the guard. They are shaped like an upside down triangle. Each one pointing down to one anotHis, in addition tHise are some strings connected to the end of the hilt. The string color is also a deep sky blue shade and extends to a few inches while it shows to be expandable. The blade itself is usually contained in a green sheath. The sheath is the same size of the blade and shows some markings on it. THise are some light blue strings attached to it to be able to hang on His shoulders. However, tHise are some times wHise Hiro will have His zanpaktou on His back. Usually making a slanted vertical line on His back and sliding down to His right breast with the string.This blade possesses a long undulating wave of hamon. while the hilt is wrapped in blue silk, and a leatHis ito is wrapped over top of that. The hilt guard is a The sheath has a hand-painted flower pattern and the kanji for "butterfly song": 蝶歌. The undercoat is a blue matching the stained glass in the hilt guard, and the sheath is finished in a high-gloss lacquer. It's full size changes with His reiatsu control as it can differ from a butter knife to that of a skyscraper in length while the sheath can grow to and the weapon itself stays in a thirty-three centimeter length. while the tip of His hilt stores a blood-clotting ointment and otHis medical serum to cure toxins and poisons that aren't original from a zanpaktou.


Zanpakutou Release Appearance: This Miao Dao sword is the perfect blend of a Shin guntō and Uchigatana in the physical design of the weapon. Being at the length of fifty five inches and weighting at almost ten and a half pounds. The blade’s quality is flexible, very lambent and plush, while it said to be so hard that not even a dinosaurs stepping on it would cause it to bend. The blade is highly taken care off and levels a golden trail on the top of the sword. While tHise is a glance of illumination on the blade and it show that tHise are some holes all over the sides of the blade used for certain effects.The protuberance or otHiswise known as the handle itself is in the length of eleven inches. As for the coloring of the handle guard, it is that of golden brass shading, while tHise are decorations of flowers being blossomed from a tree on the upper right side of the guard. The guard of the blade takes the shape of a squared figure which along the sides is carved inward. THise are small holes in the flowers which inhabit that of jewels which mainly gives the guard its luxurious appearance. The handle itself is at priestly twelve inches in length. The hilt comes in what looks to be medium blue shading while the upside down arrowheads are much like the golden shading on the guard. On top of the hilt, tHise is a special compartment wHise Hiro has the whole hilt filled with battle ointment to treat His wounds and clog the bleeding; also it will be able to take some of the pain away. On top of the handle besides the compartment, tHise is a dark blue chains sticking out from the top of the sword as its length is up to nine inches before the last piece is broken. The chains can be used to spin Shiorihasu like a sickle and to keep it in place, as well the chains will multiply even furtHis [84 centimeters max] and also this chain will clap togetHis with itself so it can be on Hiroi’s back or waist when not used. The sheath of the blade is just as luminosity as the blade itself. The sheath was made from a winter oak painted over with a winter snow white gloss wrapped in an emerald green covering to protect the oak. Aligning the sheath are transparent pieces of the original covering which links to the bottom of the sheath. Surrounding the guard diagram are three branded dark blue bands which hold in place the blade which acts as a lock, these bands mold in with the shape of the guard which allows it to hold in place. THise is on the upper part of the sheath a circle shaped holder that has a expendable chain that can stretch up to twenty two inches. When fully activate it looks to be that of a huge claymore sword.


Zanapkutou Release Names "Show them absolution Akaruitsuki!" ,Akaruitsuki Tsukyomi
Overall Ability: Reiatsu

Shikai Overall Ability: Crystals

Shikai Techniques: Shiorikanki Kousekishikon [White Frost Crystal Fang]

This is a supplementary shikai ability that activates instantly on 2.5 seconds whenever Hiro wants to use it. It is a power that is based on the night for he will have Akaruitsuki call forth particles of all kinds from both the ground and the air on to Akaruitsuk and convert it into a deep sky blue crystal substance that’s inside the Miao Dao blade and multiplying constantly on the microscopic plane. This substance can be created from thin air and be control and manipulated as long as she is in His shikai, while she can produce more and more of these crystals infinity inside the blade and released it instantly. The crystals when released will assimilate into the effects of ice and snow because of the cold temperature it had assimilated when it was activated yet it possesses the same strength and density of pure diamond. The crystals once released can take up many shapes of blast depending on the volume and the control that Hiro puts into the strike. Even having His sword slashes the same strength of the blast by compressing it into the sword and containing it until the sword slash connects with the opponent(s)’s body part or weapon. The slashes will also leave a trail of the deep sky blue colored blast which will have it’s power and size depending on both how strong the trust/slash she was putting and the volume she was letting out. It normally can match up to a cero blast though His level but depending on the volume will decide how far it can go and cover at once. Because of this, His reiatsu will be constantly producing a deep sky blue colored aura and blend with His own reiatsu signature given His the title Ice Queen. The Miao Dao will be vibrating constantly at ultra high frequencies and will get stronger and slices harder if it’s reflecting a light-based substance that is around His. While if tHise is a trace of the crystal on the object ratHis it be living or not, Hiro will be able to call forth the substance or subject towards His. This last for a maximum of two hundred yards until the crystal would disappear and be unaffected by this. Hiro will also be able to fire large moon shaped orbs from the tip of the sword towards His target and they will make the selected body part glow light blue. If the sword hits the selected body part then the damage will be nearly doubled. The strength of this technique depends on the force of the thrust.When it makes a cut on a substance, it does not leave damage on the outside of the body. RatHis it damages the inside of the body while keeping the appearance that it looks all right. The target that gets damage by this will see nothing happening on the outside of the skin but they can feel the damage that has happen to them. It may feel like a regular cut but as the battle goes on, the cut made on to the body lowers the reaction time of the opponent and damages them from within for it is slowly freezing their body with the sky blue crystals. However, if they are at least one rank lower than His, they would be able to break the crystal from their body and restore themselves to normal but it depends on how big of the gap how much they would be affected. Hiro can also fire the blast from His arms, claws, tail, legs, and or mouth. The constant energy being use for the sword can have it stretch fartHis than normal and it can be used as a whip depending on how much reiatsu she has.

Chiremusou [Scattered Dream]

This ability will soon disburse all the crystal shards the Miao Dao is constantly and have the weapon break into hundreds among hundreds of light blue crystallized shards that will resemble starts when hit by a light based substance. The shards are so small that they seam like dust substance mix with glitter however that doesn't mean that these microscopic shards aren't dangerous. For whatever the shards manage to touch, not only will it be cut for it can still slice through objects such as steel but it will soon enter the blood stream and cause frostbite and weakening of the body which can be negated by sending a reasonable amount of reiatsu through the bloodstream to cancel this out but if one is too weak then they require medical attention as soon as possible. The shards possesses the ability to cut though anything it slashes mostly for the fact that it’s actually breaking down and deteriorating the object that it’s trying to cut into pure ice crystals and absorbing it to produce more and more. This being done so fast that it makes it as if they have slashed the selected object in half. Whatever objects ratHis it being living or non living will be affected by the blade and if enough slashes are done then the whole object will deteriorate to pure ice crystals. Though it takes more slashes for a living object to fall by this then it would take a non-living substance. Hiro is controlling the shards with His mind and making it take various forms and shapes to handle multiple groups of opponents of different size and variety for both offensive and defensive capabilities. Giving it the potential to create infinite amounts of these shards to manipulate for they will be fully charged with deep sky blue reiatsu and when enough are used, they will make a blast of reiatsu much like a fang. The second counter part to this blade is its ability to be able to phase though objects like it was a ghost yet solidly any part Hiro wishes while maintaining the rest in the phantom threat. The deterioration is extremely harmful to the blood stream and may quicken the process but it will not spread pass the limb that it has entered and this will cause the speed of deterioration to increase drastically.

Bankai realease:A twister soon forms around Hiro as a light blue flash engulfs the area. Slowly the lights start to form into a rainbow as the twister at the center spawns. Slowly striking the ground like it was claws from a large animal. Hiro’s current outfit is shredded by the winds and His body is covered up in a light blue light. As she shifts back from His current appearance into His true form [with or without the gigai]. Which has two black ears will be sticking out of His head and will resemble that of a dog’s while ears on the sides of His head will disappear. His brownish eyes will soon turn into their true sapphire blue coloring, while His long black hair will shrink from His waist and towards the middle of His shoulder. The hair color of His black hair will now become teal, she will have His milky white skin producing white fur all over His body, and His nose is now black and likes a dog’s. His teeth change from normal human ones to that of a wolf is as they are truly pure white and sparkles with the right lining. THise are some colored violet tear markings on His face and some violet eyeliner. THise is a jewel necklace around His neck, each jewel was a different color, one of white, one of blue and one of purple. They were moving around a bit before stopping. Around the center place of wHise the chest would be seen is a blue and yellow seal. It has two wings on the sides and looks like a crescent moon with a star near it. The wings are constantly sparkling and glow brightly. On the woman’s body was a long red hooded cape. It looked to be made of a durable cloth not found in this world. It has a rag type bottom and the inside of the cape is black. The cape also has some sleeves attached to it to make it look like a coat. At the right side of the cape tHise is a jade green colored orb surrounded by a golden ring, with tHise being a symbol of a crescent moon at the center. Hiro is also wearing some specialized gloves, which was created by the bankai. These specialized gloves have the marking of blue flame and a skull at the center. The glove covers almost all of the hands except the fingers and stops at the wrist. THise are some blue straps at the end of the gloves. The glove’s color is that of a bright light blue and white shade. The two gloves are constantly giving off a burning sensation on the gloves. The gloves also have some markings on Hiro’s shoulders. These markings are that of the moon itself.

THise is a light blue line extending from the tattoo towards His wrist wHise the gloves are located. THise are some crystals on the gloves and on occasion times tHise are some tiny blue and or orange crescent moon on the tips of the fingers. The difference towards these gloves that tHise are some wings on both sides of the hands and the two are constantly shining brightly.Hiro body appearance increase to that of Tsukuyomi, she is now wearing a pure white corset dress while tHise is a white colored collar with a bow around His neck. THise is a small second layer of collar around the edges of the V shaped collar around His chest and theirs a star at the center. While His red colored bra is still tHise but hidden because of the dress. THise are lasses around the waist and connecting the dress togetHis. She is now wearing a white sash at His waist. The sash is tied in a butterfly knot and has some blue coloring around it. She also possesses two otHis bows around His increased thighs and hips. His forearms are wrapped around with a small-sleeved piece to furtHis the lasing around this outfit. The skirt size is that of a miniskirt and reveals His red colored pantsu and white like wolf’s tail. The skirt has some pockets inside for carrying stuff. THise is a grand total of nine tails around His bottom. Hiro has a large crescent shaped moon piece attached to His back and two long wings. The wings stretch out to a grand total of forty centimeters and look like that of a swan’s. His slender legs are no longer covered by anything but His white fur, which makes it look like stockings. His feet also have nothing covering them as they still look humanized however the toes are like that of a wolf’s with their claws attached. Hiro has His claws showing on His hands as well as they don’t get in the way of the gloves. Lastly, she is holding a simple blue colored hilt with a square shaped guard. THise is a light blue beam of light coming from the hilt as it looks to be a beamsword with it being the size of a nodachi blade, while His right hand is attached with a long swan shaped longbow, which also can change into a nodachi.

Bankai Overall Ability: Crystals

Bankai Techniques: Touketsu Kyuui [Frozen Tranquility]

This is the evolved version of Shiorikanki Kousekishikon as emit a deep sky blue mixed with a violet blue coloring around Hiro as it replaces His normal royal blue aura once she is in bankai. She is able to use the abilities of His shikai with this weapon though it in a few seconds at best. While it permanently has the passive abilities of Shiorikanki Kousekishikon, the strength, the power, speed, blast area, force, and size of Shiorikanki Kousekishikon is drastically increased in this stage and multiplied yet again if she uses His hollow mask. When it fires, the blast takes the coloring of blue flames yet they are completely different from normal flames as these are the highest burning power a flame can reach except these flames don’t burn but ratHis they freeze. The freezing power of this evolved technique is below the 3k in sub zero range and even normal water cannot put this flame out for it’s freezing ratHis than burning so this is to be treated as ice yet it can burn ice and otHis stuff like fire can but it’s a chilling feeling ratHis than a burning sensation. This sword can easily break through defenses such as hierro for an example for the sword is weakening the armor with it’s cold touch to the point it becomes as easy to break as glass allowing His to cut through the strongest of armors depending on His level and His foes. Whenever it’s released from the sword much like the original it makes a moon shape but it takes a crescent fang moon shape instead and once fired it freezes nearly everything it touches in one violent wave of crystallized ice. One stroke from the sword can make large waves of snow, equaling to an avalanche. to freeze whatever it touches depending on the level and the temperature of the area as it normally takes a few seconds yet the ice prism is breakable with enough reiatsu. Anything that this sword cuts will substance a lethal amount of freezing damage and will lead to serious frostbite deepening on the level. The sword’s attacks depending on level can be so cold that they can rob heat and even freeze the flames of anything that touches this sword. How much she charges the blade before releasing it will determine how much stronger the blast will be for His sword will carry the same destruction power as the attack with each strike. The freezing affect of this sword is so strong that it can actually freeze the air particles and slow down anything that comes close to it for the ice is causing the molecules in the body to freeze and hinder their movements to a point they’ll become living status as for the time limit will depend on the level between His and His foes. While the wind of this sword is released when she thrust His blade it will send a cero sized blizzards straight to the direction it was swing. This sword freezes anything it touches and can turn a whole football field into a winter wonder land by touching the ground.

Naiyashin [Diamond Heart]:

This ability will have Hiro encased Hisself in deep sky blue organic crystallized ice prism before soon His body will break through the icy prism and take a new appearance. Every single part of His body is made up of the same crystallized ice as she wields in His shikai for this is the evolved form of Chiremusou [Scattered Dream]. Although she can transform only certain areas of His body, she prefers to transform all parts of His body in the crystallized ice state. She can travel through any substance that reflex light as if she was light Hisself. In addition, she can teleport Hisself anywHise within eight hundred yards, however she has to know wHise she is going, and it is only attended as a retreat or to capture a target method otHiswise she can only move at short distance of twenty yards in battle. His new appearance gives His new abilities such as superhuman like durability as it can be resemble that of an advance Hirreo skin. For she can change the density of His body to any substance of the logical plan family from being solid, liquid and or gas and even converting the hardness of His crystallized body from being as weak as graphite to as hard as diamonds while having His natural speed and agility unaffected by His changing weight. She is highly resistant to most forms of physical damage and resisting large impact forces of all elements depending on His force and tHise's. Hiro can withstand the temperatures as cold as the 7K while withstanding hot temperatures as seven thousand three hundred and sixty two degrees Fahrenheit without it having affect on His body and requiring additional reiatsu layering to withstand it though each layer cost His a reasonable amount of reiatsu depending on the level until she is just unable to withstand it and shatter. She is also able to withstand and adapt to gravitational pressures of the strongest kind depending on His force and the force of the opponents are are wielding this. His body's sharpness is that of the very diamond she is made up of and only strengthen by His reiatsu. She can also fire out shards of crystallized diamond ice mirrors from His skin from all sides of His body. While she can turn His body into crystal and reflect any light substance, she is near to blind His opponents or uses His crystal like body to stretch and attack His opponents in max range of one hundred and thirty two yards. She is not limited to use His own body to fit any crystallized form or shape in this form. She is impervious to all blinding affects and can reflect them back at the opponent(s) much like a mirror to light. Hiro will also be able to use any light substance in the area to give His invisibly and reappear in a instant. While anotHis trick would allow His to use His body like a prism and create alter images of every rainbow color to distract His opponent(s). This becomes more a trickery technique when she uses them in shunpo like speeds as they too will create alter images. While transformed, Hiro's muscle tissue becomes infinitely more efficient than the organic musculature of normal humans, or most otHis organic beings for that matter. His muscles produce almost no fatigue toxins during physical activity, granting His almost limitless superhuman stamina, or at least until or unless she is forced to resume His normal state. In His diamond form, Hiro's physical strength is increased to superhuman levels. At His peak, she is able to lift approximately two tons. Anything she touches will be encase in the same crystallized diamond ice substance as His body is and she is enable to change His shape and form to many figures by the use of His reiatsu and given time. Lastly, Hiro is also self contained while transformed, requiring no food, water or oxygen. However tHise are some faults to being like this for she locked all access to His otHis abilities and powers except for His hollow mask and shunpo but even so she does not again anything else but the normal boost one would get when they put their mask on. If she is to be pierced in His heart and or brain then even with the armor she will still die and if she is forced out of the armor by a strong enough force then she will be instantly unconscious for a brief period of time. This body is highly weak against sound and the armor can be shatter by a strong enough sound by His opponents depending on level and the same goes for mental attacks. While His armor form makes His able to regenerate Hisself on the high speed spell, it drains His of reiatsu much like this form and once she has too little then she will instantly revert back to His sealed state and weakened drastically.

Haku no Kuroi [Fade to Black]

This is Hiro's most potential destructive attack for it calls forth a tiny marble shaped ball from His reiatsu. This tiny marble can seam like no threat to anyone as it moves at incredibly slow speeds however that is the point exactly. For the attack is so hidden that it seam like it was fired from a very weak human but when it comes to contact or when Hiro clinches His selected hand or focus with a deadly stare, the black marble will then instantly expand to the size of a massive dome that covers nearly one hundred and twenty yards in pure darkness. To the outside world it looks to be snow-globe with some violet colored stars while in the inside it looks like they have been transported to outer space itself for tHise are many stars inside. Hiro in this dome can control the lighting in the area so she can make it viable like night time in the real world or complete and utter darkness. This technique is to keep anyone from leaving the battle unless Hiro wishes it meaning that even though she gains shadow and darkness creation,manipulation and control she is unable to manipulate the dome to anything but it's normal size and robbing or lending the light to be in the area. Yet they can escape through this dome by overflowing their reiatsu and compressing it into one slash and giving it a strong enough force to slash through the dome and create a portal for them to escape into the real world though it depends on their strength and Hiss. The only thing that she gains any real control is that she can create, manipulate and control the gravitation force and pressures inside the dome to make it as light as a featHis or as heavy as five hundred times normal earth's gravity and she can use the push and pull affects on gravity against His foes or attacks however depending on strength of His opponents it will differ from working perfectly to completely failing and being unaffected. The people in the dome can keep themselves from being crushed if they use their reiatsu as a barrier to keep themselves from being compact though it depends on their level and Hiss for some cannot do it at all or it would be extremely difficult while otHiss it would be straining yet doable to as easy as pie. In the dome she has the ability to manipulate the shadows inside to take different forms and shapes of different variety within reason as she is even able to manipulate Hisself with this. Lastly instead of creating the dome, she can have the black marble fall into His skin and while it gives His a dark shading, she retains all the abilities she would use in the dome. This also can be done within the dome as it would have His suck up the shadows into His body and bring light to the area again. The marble is like a dark hole so if it makes contact with the skin, weapon or attack then it will try to expand over it and suck it in before compressing it into a black liquid though they can save themselves if they use a forceful enough blast of reiatsu from their pores or into their weapon to slice through the marble though how much will depend on them and His's power levels.

Kouseki Toradageki [Crystal Tiger Strike]

Hiro will soon starts to glow light blue, as nearly all of His bankai objects will soon enter His soul. She will be showing a deep sky blue aura around His body as it looks like she’s inside of a large blue flame kept inside of a midnight blue crystal. The air around His is constantly getting colder and colder to the point of it being at sub zero temperatures and light blue smoke is coming from His mouth. His eyes will be berserk much like a dangerous tiger and His tail will start to glow as well as His claws. THise are some sparks of midnight blue lighting coming out of His body as she is still glowing. His muscles budge out of His body and everything except for His waist and head increases because of it all of His natural abilities will be pushed towards their limits and this transformation powers His up by one rank as well as His reiatsu. His claws and fangs can slash out the energy out anything they touch it and absorb it into His body but more importantly they will not only be able to cut through the strongest of armor but also send a powerful crystallized casing on the section of the slash of the body as it slowly attempts to freeze the subject in crystallized ice. This transformation also allows His body to heal most wounds she takes or any infections or outside substance from His body at a fast rate yet uses up reiatsu and constant speed of regeneration can be harmful to His body at the same time. While is able to expel large amounts of wind out His mouth or make a large sound base screech and or yell at His foes. This transformation enables Hiro to take deep breath as she inhale the air and slowly sucking up any energy substance, she can get His hands on. His stomach, chest, and lower body start to expand with the inhaling. She starts to get bigger and bigger until she looks like His body is ready to give birth to icosuplets [twenty children]. She then excels as she stars spewing out small balls of light blue light from His mouth. While a gust of wind is shot right at the opponent in the shape of a crescent moon. The balls of light blue light will soon start to form into a normal sized white snow tigers. Hiro can control these with His thoughts, or His hands. These tigers are fast on their feet and leave trails of crystals on the ground. She can produce twenty normal sized snow tigers or she can combined the snow tigers to make a massive concentrated beam of light blue light at the target as it takes the shape of a huge snow tigers and strikes down on His opponents. However this ability has major downsides to such power it gives Hiro, first off His muscles will be taking strain from the boost it will be receiving and will cause His major pain because of this yet still have a mighty grip on His bones. If powered too much then some of His bones will start to shatter and the reiatsu increase will make His highly unstable and even damaging Hisself because of it. While His hands and legs will feel a burning sensation to His body and continue to do damage to His body and this will cancel out any of His otHis technique that she possess except His hollow mask but that's pretty much it. As for the healing factor on His body would be constantly damaging His body and the speed healing and damaging would shorten His life span. His primal conscious will take over of Hiro’s as His bloodlust will make His drawn to battle and she will fight until she has won, or she has no more reiatsu left to keep the technique up. She will be hard to control or talk to as she doesn’t listen to anyone but Hisself and she is easily made to getting mad. This transformation lasts only for short periods of time and can be fatal if used too many times without rest.

-History-

Birthplace: Sparta

Current Residence: Squad 6 Barracks Captains Quarters

Squad: 6

History: Starting from the day He was born, Hiro was first known as Nikon which means Victory in Greek, and taking his fathers last name of Sethos which means Dazzle. The Name fit the Boy well at birth. For The Blood of a Spartan war general, and an Athenian woman was combined to Make Nikon. He was one of the fortunate children that would not be considered useless in society. In his eyes even as an infant, you could see the light of a warrior, you could see the fire that burned within the child's very soul. When He was first seen by his mother She named him Nikon after his father. The Woman Prayed her child would follow within the footsteps of his father. The child in his infancy was very quiet, never really whining or crying, never really doing anything extremely disruptive. But he was Almost always quiet as he watched the world around him. The times he did cry were for the basic needs of a diaper change or food. He was different, and outgoing. And that difference continued into his toddler years. Just walking for a few weeks the small child was already running through the house, chasing after his always good natured father. This was what you could call, early military training. His father was teaching him how to be a strong and fast runner on the battlefield. Always smiling and laughing Nikon followed.

But when he wasn't running around, when he wasn't chasing anything that moved, Nikon would sit in his mothers lap and listen to her read ancient tales of the gods, how the god Zeus was king and the most powerful of the gods. The toddler was always enchanted and amazed with the legends, that seemed to mesh together and tell a lengthy story of how his world came to be. Above all His favorite legends were of the goddess Athena, and the God Zeus. He loved to hear of Athena's abilities to outwit the god of war Ares on the battle field. He loved Zeus for his courage to stand against his father and take over the world. The Bright blue eyed boy grew to the age of seven. He was always running about asking questions about his hometown. His Father always happily provided the history of Sparta and their unstoppable army. At the time, Sparta had just conquered Many small provinces in Italy. Nikon was amazed as his father told him of the vast lands that the army had conquered. He tried to visualize the size of it and it seemed to fill the whole world. It felt like his home had conquered the whole world! This is where Nikon's true respect for his father was seeded.

One month late he was brought to the academy, Life there was harsh, the physical training was something totally new, he ran for hours, he was whipped and beaten into shape. But the fire in his bright blue eyes would never go out, the fire that seemed to forever burn within him. He was Also watched by many of the older more experienced students in the academy. It was a custom for the New recruits within the academy to find a "Lover" of the same sex, as it taught comradery and loyalty to your brothers on the battle field. Nikon thought this as weird but was soon courted by many of the older students in the academy.. Nikon Chose someone whom would later become his closest friend, his name was Adrastus. In this culture the lower ranked boy could choose whom he wanted as his "Lover" But what shocked most was that he became much more popular in a short amount of time. The older student was a nobles son, which only helped Nikon. Now Nikon was under the responsibility of Adrastus, his training was severe. He was constantly fighting for his life it seemed.

Never once did he cry out in pain, he was taught that it was a weakness, and so he made himself strong by not crying out as a blade connected to his skin. Sure he winced, but that was all, as blood ran down his arm he continued to fight and fight hard. Nikon was becoming what his parents dreamed of him becoming. But soon after his first section of training was done, he was brought to a special ceremony where he and other children were forced to run in circles around a group of older children whiled he was whipped continuously. Nikon was lightly clothed, and as he ran he did not cry like the others, he did not bow his back like the others, he ran with his head held high. He ran and didn't react to the pain shooting from his body. His "Lover" Watching helplessly as he took the pain with almost now a smile. Nikon was a tough kid and merely shook his head as he watched other recruits drop dead. The hours passed and the group of what once was fifty now dwindled to a mere twenty. Nikon stood without his back bent in pain. He was what you could call the one that would become a future king. As The lashings were now stopped, he merely stretched out and didn't wince as Adrastus come over to tend to the bleeding wounds.

The medicine stung and yet he merely stood there with no reaction. It was because of the brutal training that Nikon was forced through had prepared him for any kind of physical pain dealt to him. His Shining blue eyes still reflected the fire of a warrior within them. He continued his brutal training but at a different level. Now he was armed with a short sword and his goal was to somehow in some way injure the much bigger and tougher opponent that was Adrastus. Nikon was Smart and through the years was able to read and predict his "lovers" movements in battle. Knowing how his opponent acted was a crucial thing seeing as if he didn’t use his brain he would have been beaten half to death. As his opponent lunged forward Nikon dodged easily and from behind easily maneuvered his blade behind Adrastus's head and made a small shallow cut upon his neck to signal his victory. Months and months passed, he was nearing his twelfth Birthday where he would move up in rank in the academy. But Those nights before his birthday the raining was much more intense and he was now kept as a prisoner with handcuffs (or what they would use as handcuffs) around his wrists and he would be beaten and made sure he was immune to pain. On His twelfth birthday His surrogate family celebrated his moving up in the academy.
But it was also on his twelfth birthday that something else had to happen... it was at night and he knew it was coming. Another tradition that Spartan soldiers to be would have to go through was well rather painful for the boy. That night it was required that his relationship with his mentor turned physical... Nikon merely shrugged it off as if he didn't care that something like that had just been done to him. But what really happened in his mind was a type of fear of that happening again, really and truly Nikon only suffered through it for the fact that he wanted to become the greatest warrior known in Spartan history. The years passed and he became much stronger, his appearance changing from that of a boy into that of a matured young man. His sun bleached blonde hair seemed to be a pale silver in color due to his constant days in the hot sun. He was tall and muscular, and held lots of promise. he was shown in a mock battle to the proctor of the academy and he was then moved up with a special group of people known as the crypteia or κρυπτείαa. This was a small festival of sorts that showed off the skills of the most promising future leaders of Sparta. Sparta would declare war upon the Helot Population. The helots, were the serfs of the Spartan civilization, and every autumn their numbers were cut down. Nikon using his only weapon, being his fists. Nikon was shown to be quite the warrior as he killed with no remorse. The κρυπτείαa was a time where any Spartan citizen (those whom are distinguished students and those whom have already graduated from the academy. Meaning the students that did not take place in this festival are not considered citizens yet) could kill a Helot without fear of blood or guilt.

Two More years passed, Nikon was now considered a full fledged citizen of Spartan and he was a member of the Spartan army. He already was rumored to be the next king, to lead the army in his fathers footsteps. As He lived his life he met a woman by the name of Amynta. This woman had to have been blessed By Aphrodite herself, this woman was beyond beautiful.. she was just god like in appearance. Months passed as they became friends, their personalities complimenting each other in every way. It was not very long before the two were to be married. Their wedding was fabulous, it was small the way that Nikon and his wife preferred it. Nikon was completely content and happy, having a wife, a home and being promoted to the generals lieutenant. The General at that time was Nikons former "Teacher" in the academy. and it seemed that this teacher was not exactly happy that Nikon had married so early in life... Was it that he was jealous? Was he mad that Nikon wasn't his? He really didn't know. Small Battles were fought and Sparta Decimated all that stood in their way..

It was three years after a major battle that Sparta celebrated as one of the best victories yet, Sparta had finally conquered Messenia. Which was a Great victory. He had although suffered a rather bad injury to one of his eyes and so he wore a piece of leather on what used to be his eye and was now a piece of heavily scarred face. It was three years later when his wife bore two children of his own, a Beautiful young girl and a wonderful son. Both had inherited his oddly light colored blonde hair, and you could have said it was the best day of Nikons life. But Then after six months of being with his family, he was called to war again. But this time something went wrong, terribly wrong, sure he was in the heat of battle, he was battling the one that taught him all he knew. This wasn't supposed to happen, how come his closest friend and the general of the Spartan army turned on him? Nikon didn’t understand... He just couldn't comprehend what happened until he looked over his shoulder, His wife, and children were dead.. Thanks to this man.. he was enraged and the rage blinded him.. Nikon's life ended after he stabbed the general through the chest.. and he himself was impaled by his adversary's sword.

His dying words were " εγώ πρέπει έχω καμωμένος εγώ ο ίδιος ισχυρότερος" Or in English, "I should have made myself stronger"

Death was a confusing thing for the man, he couldnt remember a thing about himself, he couldn't remember his name or how old he was or where he was. So the Lonesome soul wandered Looking around for anything that could tell him what and who he was. That was when he felt a sharp pain in his chest. He looked back and noted a long chain that was corroding away. Seemingly panicked, the soul did all in his power to slow down the corrosion. Thank god he did, now he wandered and it seemed as if all hope was lost, as he saw another soul also wandering.. as he waited for days until a shinigami had finally appeared, the shinigami konsoed the spirit of the former general of the Spartan army. Now Out of instinct, did Nikon reach for anything that could be used as a weapon against the man with the strange looking sword. As the Man walked toward Him Well Nikon finally felt a type of fear.. But soon a soothing voice washed over him, and he knew this person wasn’t going to kill him or well hurt him the way he did to the other soul.. or so he thought.

"What is your name?" The person had asked him.

"I-I dont know" The former Spartan warrior replied, Hiro was so confused, who and what is this person garbed in black with his sword drawn at him, he had no clue why this person wasn't attacking him. Sure he had already come to terms with the fact that he was dead, but it didn't help the matter that he still felt more and more threatened. The confused silver haired man looked at the Shinigami. This time he was sizing the shinigami up, seeing as it looked like they were going to fight. His eyes closed and he asked the shinigami, "What is your name? And Who are you?" The Shinigami said that there was no need for him to release his name to Nikon But he told him what he was. Then The Shinigami began to explain what soul society was like.. Hiro now wanted to go before that chain corroded away completely. And, so, Nikon was Konsoed willingly and transported to Rukongai's 73rd district.

Now whence the confused man found his way through the district, he became well known to be someone that beat on anyone that wasn't a child that stole from the street vendors. Mind You he never did that, Nikon never attempted it despite the burning hunger inside of his gut. He became Very respected and so he kept that reputation when a citizen asked of his name. Hiro replied with a simple, I have no name... The Citizen was shocked to an extent. But Accepted that answer. Now At the time he was staying with an elderly couple and taking care of them by getting food and water for them although they never seemed to be hungry or thirsty at all. Which was yet another strange thing because he seemed to always be ravenous. The elderly people heard that and smiled, "You can carry on a family name then.." Said the old male, "Your name from now on will be Hajime, Hiro" Hiro smiled, he wasn’t a no body anymore, he had a name to be called by...

Hiro continued to live as a "protector" of sorts for his "grandparents" and so he continued to barter, trade and do almost anything he could to get food for his family besides steal. His Morals in those days reflected the morals he had as a child and growing up in Sparta. As he lived his peaceful life he was approached one say by one of the Shinigami. Now being the Man he was, and being as congenial as he was he talked with the shinigami and was informed about the reason he was always hungry. It was this thing called reiatsu. Now Hiro didn’t believe anything the Man said about reiatsu and so he told the shinigami that until he sees it for himself he will not believe that he had any powers that were out of the ordinary. But The shinigami persisted on telling him these things until He hit a sore spot in Hiro's heart. The elderly couple that Hiro had become a grandson to. He was told with this power he could kill them and possibly kill himself. He became rather angry with what this complete stranger was ranting and rambling on about, so he took care of it his way. A fist to the Shinigami's face and he went flying backwards a few feet before skidding to a halt.

Hiro Heard what the man had said, "You will regret this choice for the rest of your life" Hiro merely laughed and went on with his daily life in Rukongai’s. Years Passed and he happily helped the couple keep the ramshackle Shack clean and a place that was livable. But he noted how the spirits that he took refuge with were beginning to weaken considerably. Hiro blaming himself and his constant need to eat. So He bought and bartered whatever he could and left it in a pile for the couple to eat whenever, before running off. District By district he made his way to the third district where he saw a group of shinigami academy students. They were all laughing and having a great time harassing Rukongai’s citizens. Again Hiro stepped in and scared them half to death with the power that radiated off of him, and it was not just the power of reiatsu. But The power he had when being in a brutal military and the ability to know how to deal with people like them.. So he used his military experience to really kind of warn the students of the consequences of harassing citizens of rukongai once more. He had strength of spirit. That was what made him a leader, but a leader with a fault. He never grew attached to the new group of citizens that now followed his example in protecting other weaker people. But there were a few that abused this privilege and were severely punished. Hiro when it came to people like them was extremely ruthless.

The years went by and he and his rag tag gang of followers finally held a meeting. It was a meeting that would forever change Hiro's Life. The Gang had said that the shinigami could be whipped into shape if you taught them they way you had taught us. It was at that Moment when Hiro made a decision. He looked back to the day when he attacked the Shinigami for saying the things he did about the old couple he used to live with. It was then when it all clicked in his mind. It was then when he laughed in spite of his stupidity. This thing they called reiatsu was half of the backbone that made him the commanding and strict leader he was during these times. His followers and their constant support of their leader was what made him feel at home. It made him feel like he was a part of an army. It Made him feel like he was in Sparta again.. Although he had no me

[Zou ۞]

Right off the bat, I'm laying down all things that should be fixed. First, we've got your fighting style. In one word, you described it as strategic. However, the requirements for that slot (requirements are listed directly below the template) state that a minimum of three paragraphs is required for that part of your app. You're going to have to fill that. Also note for appearance that if you are attempting to be the Squad 6 Captain, you must be the head of the Kuchiki Family. Your character doesn't appear to be a Kuchiki. You must wear the scarf and braid of the Kuchiki, and your traditional Captain's Haori at all times as a Kuchiki, to demonstrate your pride and nobility.

As for likes, dislikes, flaws, habits, goals, and fears, you may want to consider reading the requirements. You are required to list at least 5 likes/dislikes, 2 flaws/habits, and 1 fear/goal. But, along with these, you must include short summaries of these things. Also, Squad 6 Captain is a very high level position because of the fact that it is the Kuchiki Squad. The strongest of the noble families leads it, and the strongest of the Kuchiki is the head, who is the Captain as well. Therefore, your app should be thorough. Your appearance and personality need a bit more detail to be able to pass with the Kuchiki spot.

Now we move to powers. For your overall ability, you did not talk about anything at all. All you did was sum it up in one word, as if you haven't read the requirements. "Overall ability" should explain what your zanpakutou does in general. You said crystals. Okay, what about crystals? Does your sword generate crystals, does it command existing crystals, does it make you sparkle like crystals?

For the techniques. The first half of the description of the first shikai technique sounds like something that would be involved in talking about the overall ability, not a technique. A technique is a specialized usage of the general ability of the zanpakutou. An example is Ichigo's Zangetsu. Zangetsu eats his reiatsu to make him stronger. His technique is Getsuga Tenshou, which eats and then releases his reiatsu in a powerful slash attack. Your first technique feels like you're just talking about the general use of your blade. Now, the second technique of the shikai. Chiremusou is far too powerful. On top of being along the same manipulation levels as Byakuya Kuchiki's Senbonzakura Kageyoshi (his BANKAI), it is even STRONGER in ability. This is NOT something that a Shikai would ever have. Also, your zanpakutou seems to have no drawbacks talked about in Shikai. As of typing this part of the grading I haven't read Bankai, but if this is your shikai so far, your Bankai seems like it will be very IMBA and overpowered. You haven't listed ANY drawbacks or proper limits to your powers. Talk about proper limits and drawbacks equal to the abilities that you draw. Ichigo's Getsuga Tenshou has a drawback. The stronger the blast, the more reiatsu it eats up. The more reiatsu it eats, the more fatigue he receives.


Bankai, the shikai and bankai releases don't appear to resemble each other at all. The bankai is merely a superior version of the shikai, the ultimate form of your manifested ability. They should at least resemble each other in some way. So far, halfway into the first Bankai technique, I noticed "Oh, fire that freezes stuff. Okay, I've made a similar technique to that." But then you go on to say you can easily break through any hierro. But what if their reiatsu strength is far beyond yours? Your attack won't even be able to lay a scratch on them if their reiatsu is at a significant level beyond yours. Sure, you did say "Based on the enemy's level" (in different wording), but this also means you contradict yourself. And now you're "freezing people in place like statues." Okay, that's fine. But that's a pretty god-like ability. Where's the drawback? There is no drawback. Where's the limit? There is no limit. You also did not follow your general theme of crystals. Fire and snow? Wait what? Ice, that is plausible with crystals. But suddenly we've got your Bankai blasting out fire and snow, and suddenly using intense cold to slow molecules! This has nothing to do with crystals. This is closer to a cold or frost based zanpakutou, trying to run along the lines of absolute zero. Also, once again, your first bankai technique feels like it's describing an overall ability. The first half is just like that.

I am now roughly a fifth into your second Bankai technique. Crystal ice prism...changes appearance, okay this is your ace...Wait what? Suddenly, we've got your character able to reflect through light and travel with it! Travel AT THE SPEED OF LIGHT?! And suddenly TELEPORTATION?! Neither of these has anything to do with crystal based themes! Also, there is no listed drawback or proper limitation! Then again, the teleportation isn't even plausible since this is a crystal theme zanpakutou, and traveling with light is NEVER plausible. It is a god power that is completely god modd and IMBA to the highest degree.

Now we've got the change of durability. "Okay, you can become hard as diamond. That's plausible." Wait, what's this? Now you can change your state of matter and become a liquid, solid, or gas? Not plausible for crystal abilities, and there doesn't appear to be any limit. This is a god modd and IMBA once again, plus it doesn't match up to your theme.


I'm going to quote something from your app now.

While transformed, Hiro's muscle tissue becomes infinitely more efficient than the organic musculature of normal humans, or most otHis organic beings for that matter. His muscles produce almost no fatigue toxins during physical activity, granting His almost limitless superhuman stamina, or at least until or unless she is forced to resume His normal state. In His diamond form, Hiro's physical strength is increased to superhuman levels. At His peak, she is able to lift approximately two tons.

When did you become Superman? So, a crystal based ability makes your muscle tissue infinite more efficient than the organic muscle structure of normal humans or most other organic beings. Read that, and tell me how it makes sense. And, no fatigue is generated during physical activity because of a CRYSTAL BASED ABILITY? Say what? And now you have limitless stamina and incredible strength from A CRYSTAL BASED ABILITY?! And plus, THERE'S NO DRAWBACK OR PROPER LIMIT?! This ability is utterly IMBA, very high form of god modd.

Now we're moving on to the third bankai technique. No offense, but I am going to be honest. Based on what I have read of your app so far, I can tell you thoroughly that I am scared to see the rest.

I quote again.

This is Hiro's most potential destructive attack for it calls forth a tiny marble shaped ball from His reiatsu. This tiny marble can seam like no threat to anyone as it moves at incredibly slow speeds however that is the point exactly. For the attack is so hidden that it seam like it was fired from a very weak human but when it comes to contact or when Hiro clinches His selected hand or focus with a deadly stare, the black marble will then instantly expand to the size of a massive dome that covers nearly one hundred and twenty yards in pure darkness. To the outside world it looks to be snow-globe with some violet colored stars while in the inside it looks like they have been transported to outer space itself for tHise are many stars inside. Hiro in this dome can control the lighting in the area so she can make it viable like night time in the real world or complete and utter darkness. This technique is to keep anyone from leaving the battle unless Hiro wishes it meaning that even though she gains shadow and darkness creation,manipulation and control she is unable to manipulate the dome to anything but it's normal size and robbing or lending the light to be in the area.

My response to that? Say WHAAAAAAAAAAAAT? Incredible control over light, darkness and shadows, and creating a sub space. Okay, that is plausible with a drawback and limit equal to the strength of the technique. Wait, there's no proper drawback! There's some kind of limit that allows escape, but the chances of success appear so minimal that it may as well not exist. Now, this is also a crystal based zanpakutou, as I have repeated over and over. This power has NOTHING to do with your theme! While I have another thought, I will also note to you that ALL of your techniques are multi powered. Techniques are meant to be single powered. They do ONE thing. Ichigo's Getsuga Tenshou releases a slash of reiatsu. That's it. You don't see his technique able to release a slash, AND then that SAME Getsuga Tenshou generate a bunch of ice! Right, and this is roughly a third into your third technique. Lets read the rest.

And now you can command gravity inside of a light/darkness/space based dome. What? WHAT? All of this is from a crystal based theme. No go, that makes no sense, plus it is totally IMBA and god modd. You also seem to lack a drawback. AND, might I add, you also have the ability to sink a marble into the enemy's skin and fill them with a sub space of darkness and light and control stuff inside of them. What does that have to do with crystals, and where's the drawback?

Okay, fourth technique. What...? So you're absorbing stuff into your soul and suddenly becoming a tiger that can rapidly heal and assimilate other people and things into your body? What does this have to do with crystals, and where on earth is the drawback? Better yet, where in Soul Society, Hueco Mundo, The Human World, and all other existing worlds is the drawback? And now you can make snow tigers. Right. Snow tigers by absorbing reiatsu from the air. What does this have to do with crystals? Oh hey, I found a minor drawback. Let me look it over. Okay, this drawback is pretty minor. It's so minimal that it has basically no effect on your character! What does this mean? It's almost like it doesn't exist. There is no absolute drawback. There's just stuff that "could" happen. Judging from what I've seen so far, it looks as if you would never have it happen anyway. This technique is also a rather large IMBA, and once more has nothing to do with your crystal based theme.


Now for your history. Uh-huh...uh-huh...Nothing yet. But now we get to a point where he has NEVER cried out. Yes, he was taught it was a weakness, and he was brought up in Sparta. BUT, a small child WILL cry out when struck for the first time, especially with that kind of brutality. The goal is to beat the screaming out of the child. There's no such thing as a child that won't scream from their first blow. Not even a prodigy would be able to take it without screaming, then stand perfectly straight after, even smile during the pain.

That's just about all that's wrong with the history. However, it is also too short to get a captain spot. Normally, you could score a low tier captain spot with it. But, the rest of your app has problems throughout, and plus you're not just trying for any captain; you're trying for a high tier captain - The Kuchiki Head and the Head of Squad 6.


So, that just about sums up your app.


No offense, and I hope this doesn't discourage your stay here, but honestly...I expected so much more. The way that you boasted and the confidence that you displayed had me hoping for a much better app. You did have a few SAT words in your details, congratulations. But a few SAT words and an IMBA power doesn't make an app.

Most of your issues had to do with your powers, which are utterly horrific in my mind. They're so IMBA and God Modd that I cannot believe any proper Roleplay Forum would ever accept that zanpakutou. Due to what I've seen, if I were to give this app a letter grade, it would be D.

Please do be sure to do better when you change this. You're going to have to remodel a large deal of it. You'll want to read the explanations below the template this time so you know the standards. And you may want to reference someone else on this forum's app, just so you know what you're supposed to be doing with your character and powers.


That's all for your grading. You have a lot to fix.


~Your Favorite Lecherous Pervert, Kuroi Naito (Admin)

[Zou ۞]

Oh, and this isn't too big a deal, but you may want to spell check and grammar check this app. There are so many spelling errors and run on sentences that I'm beginning to wonder if you were drunk when you wrote this.

Also, here's a question. Based on what I've seen, are you SURE you've been RPing for 10 years?