Two reserved Hakuda techniques [FIN]

[Shawn Rabuburēdo]

I have two techniques i am making for the character i am working on: 


Technique Name: Pawāburesu: Inwādoresutorēshon (Power Breath: Inward Restoration)


Class: 6


Technique Type: Hakuda


Usable By : Sinigami, Vizards, Beast-Clan, Rogue


Technique Element: None


Technique Description and Effects : 
Breathing in while filling the center of the chest with reiatsu, this allows the user to cleanse there body from fear and class 7-5 poison. With each level of proficiency less concentration is required:  

Learned- they cannot speak and must have their eyes closed while using this technique

Proficient- they cannot speak while using this technique

Mastered- does not require much concentration

Activation: 75

How to use technique : 
While still, the user must fill their lungs by breathing in while moving reiatsu to the center of their chest. 


Technique Drawbacks :
It only cleanses weak poison and does not stop debilitating fear (you would still need the points in the proper skill for that),it also doesnt stop you from feeling fear, it just clears your mind from it after. This technique also requires a 1 in martial arts skill and a 1 in calm mind. 



Made By:
 Shawn Rabuburēdo


Reserved?: Yes, Shawn Rabuburēdo (Those he teaches)



Technique Name: Pawāburesu: Tomuki no būsuto (Power Breath: Outward Boost)


Class: 4



Technique Type: Hakuda


Usable By : Sinigami, Vizards, Beast-Clan, Rogue


Technique Element: None


Technique Description and Effects : 
Using reiatsu, the user explodes reiatsu into their muscles causing a 25% boost to Strength or RS (This boost is applied after type and you must choose which one is boosted before use) allowing for increased performance in battle. The technique costs 500 reiatsu to use and duration increases by proficiency of the user.

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Duration based on Proficiency-
Learned: 2 posts
Proficient: 3 posts
Mastered: 4 posts

How to use technique : 
Breathing outward while using reiatsu to burst and guide the stored reiatsu to the muscles.


Technique Drawbacks:  
This technique also requires a 2 in martial arts skill and a 1 in calm mind, it also causes intense pain while active (does not physically harm user). This technique requires posts equal to proficiency to rest before it can be used again without major repercussion, If used before resting period is finished it will seal your release after it ends and will remain sealed and unable to use for 6 posts (This seals all releases).

Made By:
 Shawn Rabuburēdo


Reserved?: Yes, Shawn Rabuburēdo (Those he teaches)

[Myzaraphiston Synderfell]

Hello there Heart! I will be going over your technique today, and I will let you know any comments and concerns I have with it as I read through it. The immediate first thing that stands out to me is that these are both Hakuda techniques that are available to Fullbringers, which isn't exactly a thing for a Shinigami-based Martial Art. I would personally suggest that you drop that from the tech. With that addressed, I will go into mechanical stuff now.

I will start with Outward Boost, as stat-boosting techniques will always get a closer inspection. Compared to other stat boosts, this is an extremely low class, one that would be available immediately from character creation. That breaks precedent with pretty much every other stat-boosting tech on-site. In addition, it functions for a longer period of time than higher classed stat boosts, for a fraction of the TTP cost. 30 TTP will get you 8 posts, for a general amount of 300-600 reiatsu, pretty much from the get-go. In comparison, using the Pulley function of Willpower to last as long will cost you 850 reiatsu, is going to injure you badly, and is only available starting at Class 4 if you pay 80 TTP. In addition, the reiatsu regeneration is a non-drawback, as you generally don't regenerate reiatsu in combat anyways (barring being a Quincy). That is, of course, factoring in that you can ignore that particular drawback for essentially free if you learn the prior technique.


Aside from canceling one of the drawbacks of Outward Boost, Inward Restoration doesn't really seem to do anything, as reiatsu recovery isn't really a thing in threads. The drawback can be bypassed entirely with fairly little investment, but that's not a problem as the technique doesn't do much to begin with.

With Outward Boost, I would consider changing it to short-term stat boosts, lowering the cost, and boosting the class to at least four or so. As Inward Restoration doesn't do anything, you can probably safely drop that one.

[Myzaraphiston Synderfell]

Thank you for letting me know about the changes you made, Heart!

For Inward Restoration, I would reccomend assigning classes to the poisons rather than saying weak poisons. Perhaps poisons classed from 7 to 5 would suit best? In addition, you can make the reiatsu cost lower if you wish, seeing as its a class 6 Hakuda.

Outward boost is fine as is now for me.

[Kyomei Kuchiki]

As this has been waiting for changes for more than one month, going to remove it from the mod queue. As an aside, Reserved Techniques require the TTP saved for them ahead of time and require you to be able to actually be of the class to use them before they can be graded, customarily.